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I dunno why you didn't use HTML lists / 3rd level headers for the 3rd level headers. (Underlining is the greatest sin ever introduced to typography.) You've lost the indentation on related list items which makes it much more difficult to read.
Also, the top text is a bit... well, verbose. It's pretty much taking up all of the space before the break to say... nothing.
>If you need help with your drawings, /art/ is more than happy to help you out, regardless of your talent or ability.
Already mentioned in the rules below, so it's being repeated.
>/art/ does have a couple of guidelines we would like you to follow.
Given that this thread has guidelines in it, this is implied.
>This thread also houses the Directory, where you can easily find the various artists that show off their work or take on requests.
Given the thread title, this is implied.
You've got three sentences saying what /art/ "is":
>This is the board for all your pony fanart-related news!
>/art/ is a community that promotes improvement: we're all here to help each other out.
>If you need help with your drawings, /art/ is more than happy to help you out, regardless of your talent or ability.
>/art/ is the place to be to connect with fellow artists, to share work, to learn how to draw ponies, to improve your work, or simply to admire the other artists at work!
Well, which one is it? I'm confused now. You could just throw all these points into a list if there's that many of them.
Also this line in particular:
>If you're an artist, or you want to be an artist, you've come to the right place.
makes it seem that this place is exclusive to /art/ists.
>If you feel someone is being unnecessarily rude to you or others, keep your cool and report them.
Repetition of the previous statement to report rulebreakers.
>If you want something simple for an OC, try to make something yourself first. /art/ will be happy to help you out.
They're only happy to help if it's for an OC? The language I used was specifically written to not imply that.
To give you an idea of how verbose this is now: There's more words in it than in the /fic/ sticky. I dunno if that's what you're going for, but that block of (mostly unsubstantial) text right up front is probably going to stop half the people who were considering reading it from actually doing so.
My 2c, anyway.
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