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128478 No. 128478 [View]

Why does this remind me of My Little Dashie?

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>> No. 128484
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My Little Dashie would have been much cooler if Dash fell on a rock, killed herself, and God "damned her ta' Hell."
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>> No. 128487
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Oh come on! I can see the fic on EqD already: "The Inferno" by Dashie Alighieri. That's a cool concept, and you know it. XD

In fact, I call dibs on Dashie Alighieri as a username.

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125737 No. 125737 [View] [Last 50 posts]
#Reviewer #Discussion

I don't know who you are. I don't know what you want. If you are looking for ransom, I can tell you I don't have money. But what I do have are a very particular set of skills; skills I have acquired over a very long career. Skills that make me an annoyance to people like you. If you just ignore my thread now, that'll be the end of it. I will not look for you, I will not pursue you. But if you don't, I will look for you, I will find you, and I will kill you review your stuffs.


This is the third iteration of a review thread.
If you ask me to review your story, you are asking that I become emotionally invested in your work. You are not asking me to pass the salt at a dinner table; you're asking me to go through your hard work with a judgmental eye, and hopefully come back to you with helpful things to add.
You will not get a number rating, as I do not decide if you pass or fail. Keep trying and you will succeed.

Rule #1: No repeats. You get one attempt to wow me. I'm not going to read the same chapter through fifty different revisions. Once I see a story, that's the version that's locked in my head. It's the version I'll remember you by. I won’t even be able to add much in the ensuing chapters after that point.
Rule #2: Do your best work. You are trying to make an impression on me. I will remember you by the work that you show me. For a good, long while too.
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>> No. 128044
>But then you have to deal with Twilight not being cut off, and being able to ask for advice.

Yeah, I need to fix it so Twilight isn't a sobbing mess over not being able to see her old friends as much. The point of separating the mane six isn't to make Twixie shipping easier. In a way, it actually makes it harder, since now there's less opportunities for conflict. I'm doing this because I genuinely believe that season four is going to involve Twilight living in the Crystal Empire and having her screen time reduced to about the same as Celestia had in season one and two. I feel that a story about Twilight learning to say goodbye to old friends would be much better something like: Twi losing her wings a couple episodes in or, even worse, her staying in Ponyville and nothing really changing except for a meaningless title and the ability to shoot lasers while flying.
>> No. 128286
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I got something for you, Minty.

"Bedtime Stories"

Short description:
Sometimes the truth of a story is more important than the facts.

Long description:
Sunshine, sunshine, ladybugs awake
Clap your hooves and do a little shake
Find a friend to help you fly
Love will help you touch the sky
>> No. 128481
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Twilight at the Disco
Romantic Comedy

A/N I need help with my grammar, I'm on my 2nd strike with EQD and the only thing they complain about with me is the grammar and tensen

Princess Twilight has found herself with more and more political power than both Luna and Celestia. Not wanting to upset the balance of power, Twilight brings her concerns to the other princesses. Unfortunately, the royal sisters won't be of much help; after all, change comes slowly to the immortal. However, for a certain spirit, change is an everyday occurrence. Now Discord has become Princess Twilight's advisor, and they are driving each other crazy.
However, hate can morph into love—but they'll still be driving each other crazy.

Link: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/93863/twilight-at-the-disco

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128474 No. 128474 [View]

It seems to me as if Luna/Cadance - given their quite disparate personalities - might make an interesting pairing; whether it's simply as friends, or possibly more.

I'm writing such a tale, but would like to solicit some opinions.

Clearly the issue here being Shining Armour. So, given that and keeping it short and sweet - what's the consensus? What would readers' opinions be?

Alternate Universe: Shining Armour and Cadance were never together. I imagine the possibility of Shining/Rarity for some reason.

Extant Universe: As canon, however for whatever reason, they are no longer together. May require a "jump" into the future. Presumably, would also require a more adult-orientated perspective to allow for their separation.

Moral Event Horizon: As canon ... However, anything that happens between Luna/Cadance happens while the latter and Shining Armour are still together. Absolutely would require a more adult-orientation perspective to allow.
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>> No. 128476
Cadance, bi? This is the first time I've ever heard that.
>> No. 128477
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I think this is what started it.
>> No. 128479
It really depends on what you want to do with the story, and what sources of conflict you want to handle / show. For example, if you omit Shining Armor's presence in an "Alternate Universe" all fanfics are alternate universes to an extent, you're more free to focus on a romantic relationship between Luna and Cadence.

If you keep Shining Armor in the story, a romance between them brings new obstacles that you, the author, might explore. For example, infidelity and guilt color Cadence's actions (or even Luna's, because she also feels responsible). Grief over losing Shining Armor (through death or divorce) might also be something you can work with.

You alone have the option of where you want to take your story (because it's your story); just make sure you're aware of the different aspects that come with each option. This will let you choose the story you think is the most interesting / in line with your writing preferences.

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128426 No. 128426 [View]
#Collection #Normal

Two threads in a row, who thunkit?

So yes. Following from my previous misguided thread, I'm here with a proposal, thanks to two fellow charlatans in #fic, Pony_4 and Figments.

So how about this? A short free-for-all prompt thread, like how some tumblrs are doing it. A short prompt. One hour. Optional rules may added. A promise to give each other's work a quick lookover. (Not(!) a "review". Just a general opinion of that sort.)

Goddess knows how many threads like these have died before mine, but hey, let's try to make this work, shall we?

Proposed guidelines:
1) Prompts will be decided by an appointed member of the board before hand. No voting; those usually only slow the process down from what I seen. If the prompt turns out to be unsatisfactory, it may be struck down and replaced with another prompt.
2) Participants gets one hour to write and edit, starting from the timestamp of the prompt post. A grace period of five minutes may be allowed for last minute entries.
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>> No. 128468
I don't think it's so much 'board is dead' as it is 'not my cup of tea'. At least that's the case for me.
>> No. 128471
I'm just waiting for this to start.
>> No. 128472
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Well, seeing as posting is the only indication of activity, not posting gives the impression of no activity. XD

Oh, glad you're onboard, Filler.

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128428 No. 128428 [View]
#Discussion #Advice

You finish a story you've been working on for months. It's been on your mind constantly, all the ideas you've had have been about this story. You've been shaping and molding it, even when you're away from your desk. You apply the final touches to the final chapter and click publish. Suddenly, just like that, the story you've spent these months working on is over.

What do you do when you finish a story you've spent so long working on? What's next?
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>> No. 128432
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Start another one. You really should have plans for your next story lined up and ready to go by the time you finish the one you're on.
>> No. 128436

As for me, I usually have a couple stories in the mix at once.
>> No. 128440
>You finish a story you've been working on for months.

>You've Finished a Story

>Finished a Story

My soul would rest easy in the knowledge that I had actually finished something I had started.

Of course, if I wanted to repeat the feat, I'd drudge up some unearthly inspiration and return once more to the killing fields word processor of my choice.

Authorship is Sisyphean occupation, after all.

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128419 No. 128419 [View]

After an incredibly long absence, I find myself returning to this place.

Or rather, what's left of it. I'm not one for long-winded posts, so here's the gist of it:

Now I suppose we can all gather around to moan about the slow demise of this board. Or we can do something productive. Time and again, the one issue that has been brought up is the lack of things to do here. I agree. We probably should be doing something other than reviewing.

So how about this? A short free-for-all prompt thread, like how some tumblrs are doing it. A short prompt. One hour. Optional rules may added. A promise to give each other's work a quick lookover. (Not(!) a "review". Just a general opinion of that sort.)

Goddess knows how many threads like these have died before mine, but hey, let's try to make this work, shall we?

EDIT: Because Figgy is a niggardly arse, Pony_4 was the first to bring up this idea and Figments allegedly helped.
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>> No. 128422
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Welcome to the wastes.

If I were you, I'd probably edit your OP to focus more on what you want this thread to be (60 minute fic prompts) instead of inviting discussion on "why /fic/ is dead". I appreciate your attempt at generating activity, but a good old-fashioned "/fic/ debate that wastes time and goes nowhere" would probably just be adding suffering to the relative death of this board.
>> No. 128423

I suppose.
>> No. 128424
Fair enough. I think I'll leave this up here since I /think/ there is no harm in discussing this current state. Hey, might even lure some of the lurkers out. (I know you guys are there!) But what do I know, I am an optimistic man at heart.

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#Author #Sad #Grimdark

>> No. 128404
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Hello, and welcome to /fic/.

I believe that there is a "no single-fic review threads" rule is in effect here, so this thread may be in violation of that. However, if you'd like help on your story, I'd be more than willing to take a look at it if you re-post it in my review thread, located here: >>128162.

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123480 No. 123480 Autosaged [View] [Last 50 posts]
Greetings all, and welcome to the Training Grounds, the review thread for all authors, reviewers, proofreaders, and editors, both newcomer and seasoned veteran alike. It isn't the only such thread, but it's usually the busiest! (Previous edition of The Training Grounds; The sticky, which contains important information)

If you're a reviewer, old or new, and you want feedback on your review, please put a "*" at the front of the subject line of your review post.
For writers:
Submission guide | TL/DR of the submission guide | List of TTG regulars | Submission form | List of recently-finished reviews | Reviews in progress
For reviewers:
How to review | List of unclaimed requests
For Maintainers:
The full, current active queue | Statistics and queue-dump text for thread updates | A guide to how it's all organized
Live communication:
The IRC channel
Some Notes:
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>> No. 128174
Your story is locked behind a password. Either provide us the password or remove it so the story is visible to anyone with the link.
>> No. 128257
There is a critical shortage of inrtomafive articles like this. http://gvbdwch.com vcmmdlkjzy [vcmmdlkjzy.com] [link=http://gtdfnckkw.com]gtdfnckkw[/link]
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#Reviewer #Normal #Crossover #Random #Sad #Comedy #Sci-fi #Shipping #Grimdark

I have a lot of reading experience and I want to try my very best to help some writers. I have given feedback for some pretty good writers, who had apreciated it.
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>> No. 128376

Respect indeed. Shall I post here?

You got a full plate, OP, or do you want more?
>> No. 128379
Not something you see everyday around here. Interesting.
>> No. 128394
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Well, wish I'd noticed this thread ten days ago. Nonetheless, welcome. It's always nice to see new ponies around here, especially if they intend to stay. Reviewing stories will definitely teach you a lot, but don't worry if you're new to it. (I say this only because I don't know how new you are) Just give what feedback you can on the story, add some encouraging words, and you'll pick up the rest as you go along. Good luck to you, mate.

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128324 No. 128324 [View]

Simple question:
What fanfics have contributed to some of the greatest headcanons you hold?

What fanfics have designed an Equestria you would love to see canon, even though it is impossible to do?

What headcanons in fanfics have you abhorred so much that it made it difficult to read the story?
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I can't remember the name of the fic, but there was a story where Applejack suddenly got the abilities of Pinkie Pie. In it, there were a scene where Applejack's buck kicks released an earth pony magic signal to the tree that it was time to release the apples, and where Pinkie can get anywhere just by thinking of a place and go through a door. But, whenever I watch the show, these details are completely forgotten for me.

Friendship is Optimal's optimal dream world(s) comes to mind, but the amount of conflicts, unpleasentness and general logic in it would be very low.

Top Gear: Worst Diplomats in the World was a well-written and somewhat serious crossover between Top Gear and FiM. After some chapters, the chaps come across a Derpy at the post office and a Time Turner being very alike the Doctor, whose scenes are both explained in detail, which detracts greatly from a realistic canon-based experience up to that point in the story.

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128297 No. 128297 [View]

Long time stalker, first time poster. I have to do some english coursework this year, (woo) and I was planning on looking at how forums use jargon to yadayada. Am I allowed to screen cap certain threads as 'evidence' for my work? Or should I cover names/ pics etc?


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>> No. 128299
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You should ask your teacher/professor on what to do, since what's expected of you may vary from class to class, but since forum posts are usually text, block quotes should work, for the most part. Just remember to cite them properly, with MLA or Chicago or whatever your teacher/professor wants.
>> No. 128301
This question would probably do better on >>/meta/, in case the mod team / staff have any rules about this sort of thing.

With that disclaimer out of the way, first bear in mind that the MLA and APA both have methods of citing online resources, and one of the things to include in these is "date of access". So, depending on your teacher / professor's standards, a screencap without a date of when you accessed the website might be invalid. Therefore, remember to take down the date when you do a screenshot.

As for my personal opinion? If you're on a public forum that is freely and easily accessible to the public (including a "registration wall" where you only need to make an account), people post that information publicly. It's up to them to realize who might be watching or what their information could be used for. The old adage is, if you don't want something on the Internet, don't post it. Since you're using this for education / sociological analysis, you're not doing anything unethical with the information that is freely obtainable for you, so go ahead.

The ethicality might be different in situations where you can't freely and publicly access the information. A classic example would be Facebook, where your friend's profile is set to "friends only". In that case, he's sharing the information on a limited basis that you just happen to have access to; you might look for getting his permission first in that case. Similarly, if there's an online community that's behind a paid registration wall, you might ask them if they have any regulations / guidelines about using information obtained on their forums for educational use.

However, you're not asking this question on Facebook or, say, Reddit's Gold Lounge. You're asking this on a freely available website, where it's understood that this information is publicly available. You should be good (from a legal standpoint), but if you wa

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122131 No. 122131 [View]
#Open Reviewing

Please note: this is not a standard review thread. It’s for synopses/descriptions rather than entire fics, and anyone may feel free to chime in. Previous thread at >>70737

The synopsis, while small, is in some ways the most important part of a story. A good one can score you more readers, while a bad one can stop readers in their tracks. So here’s a mini-review thread. Submissions should include a title and tags, in addition to the synopsis.

General advice:

-Proofread. Proofread the buck out of your synopsis. If I see spelling and grammar errors, that doesn’t bode well for the fic proper.
-Keep it relatively short. A paragraph or two, sure, but don’t try to fit a whole chapter in there.
-Don’t try to be fancy. Ellipses, semicolons, em dashes, and suchlike are generally unnecessary in such a short piece.
-Don’t be vague. Don’t be coy. Don’t be mysterious.
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>> No. 127788
Your synopsis gives me a good idea of what your fic is about which is exactly what a synopsis should do, however I am not enticed to read it at all. Honestly though that has far more to do with your premise than your synopsis. Making a Mary Sue an interesting character is an interesting challenge, but one that I have never seen work out well. I wouldn't recommend it.

Anyway back to your synopsis. Honestly I'd say it does a great job except for that cliche last sentence. Remove that and you should be good to go.
>> No. 127802
Title: Escapades of an Smut Peddler
Tags: Romance, Slice of Life
An interlude in a newly appointed Canterlot scribe's life from when he's being held hostage in a power-play among the Noble Houses. A candidate who is the perfect pawn even though a bastard child. But with their bickering, Flick I. Swish finds his life on pause for the most part.

Despite the assassination attempts and threats made against him to force his father to change his Will... Flick finds the time to write about love. Usually called smut by his editors and nightmarish to his critics. Only his Head scribe seems supportive but she's blackmailing him to con stallions looking for love.

While trying to find someone like his mother to romance, it turns out he's more like her than he realized. He tends to bring out the 'something' in everyone he meets.
>> No. 128284
I couldn't find Dash's denial but I loved No Foals

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122969 No. 122969 Autosaged [View] [Last 50 posts]
#Discussion #Equestria Daily

Previous thread >>120150

Hello again, fillies and gentlecolts, and welcome to the sixteenth installment of the “Ask An Equestria Daily Pre-Reader Anything Thread”! Feel free to ask us anything* and we’ll do our best to answer.

*Anything that has to do with Equestria Daily, the pre-reading process, fanfiction, alcohol, regrets, or Nicolas Cage. Keep questions on other subjects to a minimum.

We’d also like to include a brief FAQ in this initial post, since we seem to hear a lot of the same questions:

Q: How long does the pre-reading process take?
A: Depends entirely on how many pre-readers have free time and how interesting the story looks. Could be an hour, could be a week or more.
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>> No. 128412
We're now on autosage and off the front page, if anyone wants to make a new thread. I've never created a thread, but I'll try to figure it out and find a picture to use if it goes on long enough.
>> No. 128413
It does; thanks for replying!
>> No. 128415
New thread! >>128414

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123750 No. 123750 [View] [Last 50 posts]

Well, I guess if everyone's going off to greener pastures, it is my time to inherit the board! My name is Meek, and I will try and give you some ideas about your story that can improve either your tale or your self esteem.

My specialty isn't grammar, don't come to me for that. If you give me a story that I can comment on and I notice an error, I'll tell you but my brain is a sieve with holes larger than I'd like. What I want to do is tell you how the story affected me. Did you like my story? Does my OC work? Do I write in character? How did it make you feel? These are questions I would love to answer.

So I'll read your story and tell you what I think. It's pretty modular, if you want something just tell me and I'll zero in on that. And as you can guess from my image, this thread will hopefully be positive!

Submission guidelines:
1. I'll take anything I can read, but I recommend Google docs so I can comment.
2. Try not to go to far over 10k words per a submission.
3. No gore or clop, but I'm fine with violence and heavy shipping.
4. Have fun!
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>> No. 125524
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um... if somepony could, i'd like someone to edit my excerpt... that would be great! my editor is swamped and i need to make sure this is fine...


Also, send me a message Via The Google Doc Chat or Skype if you want: RockerMan503 or FlutterGuy503
>> No. 128248
I have a fic with over 55K words, would it be alright if I still posted it here?
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Good luck if you do. The last review that "Meek" posted in this thread was over ten months ago.

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128089 No. 128089 [View]
#Single Fic #Shipping

By: The Titanium Dragon [www.fimfiction.net]

Howdy folks! I finally took the plunge and wrote some pony fanfiction. So what did I end up writing? Well, something about ponies kissing and breakfast food.

Crêpes [www.fimfiction.net]

Rarity takes her friends to a Prench restaurant in Canterlot for breakfast and orders one of her favorite dishes, crêpe sucrées. But Applejack is skeptical of the food - crêpes are just a thin layer of cooked sweet dough, nothing more than an excuse to eat whipped cream and sugar without consuming anything of substance. The debate over the nature of crêpes leads the pair to a bet, Applejack allowing the unicorn to give her a makeover and show her off, the unicorn going a day without her precious makeup and fake eyelashes.

This is a 20,000 word Rarijack fic. Any sort of constructive criticism or feedback on it would be appreciated.
>> No. 128093
The board's pretty dead. You're probably get a faster response by asking in the IRC.

>> No. 128097
This appears to be finished at the moment? Sure it says it in the OP and everything, but what type of criticism are you looking for?

Just more people to read it? New fans? New adversarial conflicts? Questions and comments?

I'm still on ponychan, so I'm guessing you made this thread to advertise a bit more than constructive critique, but that's just an opinion really. They're free to everyone.
>> No. 128246
Criticism is always helpful, even if the story is done, because it helps me learn for next time. If there are things people think are good or bad, it helps me construct future tales.

I feel kind of bad that you responded to this and I never even saw your post, but I kind of gave up after a couple days. I was really just looking for what people thought of it, as it was the first fanfic I wrote <3

I've got a few others in the pipeline.

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