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87698 No. 87698 Autosaged [View] [Last 50 posts]
What? These aren't fics! This is wholesale deception! NOW THAT'S THE IDEA! It's just an old tattered copy of of Past Sins edited with an alicorn playing frisbee. For $100? SOLD! Who the hell has an alicorn playing frisbee? You're crazy like a fox, here's my wallet!

Your one stop shop for alicorns and frisbees! FICS. Books about MLA. Come and get 'em at FICS. Just ride the /fic/ shuttle right up the thread to FICS. Come on down where you can turn to stone in the gaze of a grouchy cockatrice. We will make that happen for you!

>BKAW< "Oh sweet Celestia, n-"

All the cool kids wanna write FICS for the winter! Your little sister is insane for FICS! I bet I know what you four clop to! FICS! I really like it when my grammar is elegant and perfect! FICS.

We've got deep-fried seaponies and horse puns! FICS. One time I chased a squirrel into Twilight's library and after that I couldn't find him! FICS. I am not lying, ladies and gentlemen. You get a 10 out of 10 on a Vanner Review, and I'll let you come down here and SNAP MY SUSPENDERS. I am THAT crazy. FICS!

Applebloom & Sweetie Belle! We've got them in stock at FICS! If you don't come down here in the next ten minutes, I'm gonna stare into the eyes of a grouchy cockatrice! Come on down, buck my apples. Anyone got a good mare? Bring her down. I'll show her who's boss. I know how to handle a mare when she gets out of control. FICS.
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>> No. 91163
>>89096
Well, Let me thank you right now for your review. No matter good or bad, its always appreciated. Now, other than the title and the fact that it's sci-fi with space... It's not a crossover with Halo. It's ponies in a civil war. But I digress, after going through and re-reading this fic, I must say that the first paragraph would not sit well with me if I was a reader. One of the themes of the story was to be Rainbow testing her loyalties as well, although we have not really seen that yet, but chapter eleven was supposed to set that up. But to be honest, this fic was dying before you reviewed it anyway. I was getting tired of writing it. I'm working on something new with another author. So I thank you again for your review! I will use it to better my writing.
>> No. 91256
>>88703
Awesome, thanks for the review.

I'm glad you pointed out a lot of this stuff, I kind of needed a slap in the face about my writing style and fetish for using commas everywhere and anywhere I can.

I'll take your suggestions to heart, and I'll read my other chapters including the unpublished ones and attempt to find similar errors there, but I'm a bit of a rubbish proofreader (as in my mind reads what it wants to read, not actually what's on the page).

And yes, my OC is incredibly self-insertion and mary sue, and it does get worse in the next chapter, but I'm hoping to impose enough limitations and complications to make him a bit more... down-to-earth. It really would have suited the storyline better had I made him a unicorn, but wings are just so damned *cool*!

Thanks again for the review!

And yeah, old computers are the best :D
>> No. 93869
>>89064
I'll take this one.


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93300 No. 93300 [View]
#Discussion
Got any nuggets of fic writing wisdom to share?
See if you can fit it in a sentence.

To start...

Characterization counts.
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>> No. 93372
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93372
My favourite:

There are no bad ideas, only bad execution.
>> No. 93381
Regularly ask yourself:
"Am I writing for the reader, or for myself?"
>> No. 93498
Don't marry yourself to your story, it can ALWAYS be written better.


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84879 No. 84879 [View]
#Single fic #Shipping
Hay PonyChan this is my first fic about that all popular Vinyl Scratch and Chance-a-lot a not so well known background pony.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/11104/Vinyl-met-him-by-Chance
This is the first chapter with the second one on the way stay tuned.
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>> No. 85553
Oh, and Ion Sturm,
Im four chapters in on my new fanfic.
I'll post it hear on /fic/ so that you can give me advise/hurtfulwords/critisisum/insolts.
and i found a spell cheak on my computer =D
>> No. 85564
>>85553
Why are you bumping a thread with unrelated chat?
>> No. 85568
>>85564
i didnt bumb it. i just forgot to put sage in it.
and because if i put t in chat, you wouldent get the message.
..........
my contrabution: I cold barly read the story. no me needs to he sead.


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93124 No. 93124 [View]
#Single fic #Normal #Sad #Psychological
Title: Behind a Sunny Face:

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/16931/Behind-a-Sunny-Face

Synopsis:

"There's no such thing as a purely happy memory of a lost pony; it will always be tainted with a longing that shall never be fulfilled."

Princess Celestia is never seen without a kind, warm smile on her face. Yet, she's over a thousand years old...just over two thousand, to be exact. She has problems no other pony could ever imagine, including losing every friend she has ever had. How does she smile? And what other problems does she have? In this story, Princess Celestia shows Twilight a secret room and prepares her to deal with inevitable loss. Afterall, as a powerful unicorn, Twilight will also outlive many ponies. She also shares many scenes from her life, to show her faithful pupil exactly what it's like to be her.

I have been writing for about eight and a half now, and recently I got into MLP fanfiction, which has provided a wonderful universe for me to explore certain themes and ideas that have been bouncing around my head. When I first started watching, I found Celestia to be a fascinating character (just like everyone else did), so in this fic I try to explore her character and detail the consequences of being such a powerful, royal, long-lived figure. I'm sure this has been done to death, but I hope you'll enjoy it nonetheless.
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>> No. 93127
>>93125
Agreed, Mr. Wings's comments have been very helpful, and he is the main reason why I did an almost complete overhaul of chapter one. Celestia displays MUCH more emotional restraint, and instead of talking about all her problems, only one is covered (losing friends during a long life). She also illustrates why this problem is also relevant to Twilight. More showing is used (after all, Celestia is super magical and all, so no reason why she shouldn't be able to project memories) and when there is an outburst of emotion, it feels more natural.

Of course, I'm biased, but the revised chapter one is much better than the original. I'll probably end up taking the original down in a few days. So if you have time, take a look.

Um...that is, if you don't mind, of course...*whimper*
>> No. 93133
Dunno if I rank a "Mister"...

>>93125 have a repost!
http://pastebin.com/UqjB6Nbt
>> No. 93445
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Just finished chapter three of my story. Haven't done much heavy proofreading/editing yet, so please forgive me.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/16931/3/Behind-a-Sunny-Face/Chapter-Three

Pic unrelated.


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22219 No. 22219 [View] [Last 50 posts]
'Sup. I'm StarmanTheta, aspiring writefa--writefriend. Writing's always been a passion of mine, but not until recently have I decided to pick up fanfics again after my rather...no, not 'rather', just plain horrible fanfics of my preteen years. However MLP has inspired me to start writing fanfiction again, so here I am.

So here we are; I've started this thread to serve as a general place to showcase and, hopefully, discuss my fics, as well as through out current and planned projects and such. Probably super vain to do so, as I only have two fics at the moment and no real name. I may not reach the level of renown in this fandom shared by SlyWit, Squeak, Pride, Raging Semi, and others--in fact, I probably won't--but it's still fun to try.

So yeah. I'll also take requests for both prose and poetry, although no promises on when it'll get done 'cause I work slow as hell. Also feel free to critique anything I post, and don't be nice about it; you need someone to rip you a new asshole every once in awhile to improve. Anyway, my two fics right now are these:

Helix Aspersa
http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/05/story-helix-aspersa.html
Snails visits his secret bug collection and reminisces on his life. My first (well, second) foray into MLP fics. It was both an attempt to work on imagery and third-person limited, both things I had had trouble with, but also focus on an unpopular character and give them an interesting spin on their interpretation without being too melodramatic. In short, an experiment.

Diamonds Among Zirconium
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AkJEnoWyxhZhPWSRzXQzZPYurANjhAENagzqAXqkTLI/edit?hl=en_US&authkey=CNyg0asE
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>> No. 75330
>>75314

Thanks. Glad you liked it.

Although there are some damn good pony fics out there, so I wouldn't call it THAT good
>> No. 76894
So, awhile ago I thought to myself, "hey, there's not a lot of m/m shipfics" and then I thought to myself, "Hey, there's not a lot of fics about gryphons", so then this bastard mind of mine started forming ideas and it came to this.

This is the first chapter of a ship fic I'm trying to write. It's about a member of the wonderbolts being in a relationship with a member of the gryphon equivalent of the Wonderbolts, the White Talons, and is set over the course of a few days when Equestria and the Gryphon Kingdom have agreed to have their respective flight teams perform together for the first time in decades as a way to bolster relations between the two nations. Given that the two of them are more or less national symbols, and that the Gryphon Kingdom is pretty homophobic, they have to keep their relationship under wraps.

I'm making this OC x OC since 1. there are no male gryphon canon characters and 2. I feel more comfortable shipping two OCs together than an OC and a canon character, even if that canon characters is just a name or an image with zero characterization. It's a little rough at the moment, but I'll submit it to EqD after editing. It'd also be the first time I'd done a multi-chaptered piece in...my life, actually. Fingers crossed.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PQOkxVsVitRUQnPLloEgHvClG61tBsX3hwYf8b_p1k8/edit?hl=en_US&pli=1
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93341
Some Cranky Doodle fic:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1QjciwhPImliiNyLdlgqMT8Vxr5ha4lDw0eHL0ofpwgI/edit


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93136 No. 93136 [View]
#Author #Collection #Normal #Sad #Shipping
With the third installment of the series completed,I can finally post it here. This Is a shipping/bittersweet/slice of life fic I have started last year as a standalone, but quickly evolved in a more complex and complete story; some may have heard or read this before(I hope) on Equestria daily, but posting it here can't do no harm.

Derpy's Bebop is " A journey inside Ditzy's mind, dealing with something she had never experienced before." to use the first description I've ever given it.

Another Day's Dawn is a short snap of the morning of a normal workday, seen from both perspectives of the characters.

Trust Me is the last chapter, Blues taking Ditzy deep into the Everfree forest for reasons unknown to her.

The first two are about ten pages each, while Trust Me is longer, around 15 pages.

I hope you enjoy them and, as always, don't be shy in the comments if you didn't like it! We all need criticism to get better.
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>> No. 93279
>>93278
errr " impossibilitated"... Unable.
>> No. 93281
>>93278
Works for me!
>> No. 93282
>>93281
yay. I'll stop spoilering stuff now.


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88413 No. 88413 Autosaged [View] [Last 50 posts]
#Event
Last Event: >>77900
Times, current list of participants, and accolades: http://goo.gl/kj9XZ

Hello and welcome to the second coming of our now-monthly, courtly writing derby, heretofore known as a “write-off” — an event where we, in a short time frame, pen stories from a prompt. The stories are submitted anonymously, and a winner is then chosen from public voting. The contest is open to all willing participants, provided you have the capacity to bring word to metaphorical paper.

How It’s Gonna Go Down
Contestants will write a story from a prompt given at the event’s onset — Friday 9th, at 20:00 Coordinated Universal Time. (“What does this time mean to me?” Never fear, Wolfram is here: http://www.wolframalpha.com/input/?i=9%2F3+20%3A00+UTC.) Stories are due 20:00 UTC the following Monday, giving contestants 72 hours to finish their work. This is a strict deadline.

If you’d like to participate, simply drop your name below, and I’ll add you to the list.

Submission
Submissions should be emailed to “[email protected]”. Stories may be sent in any format desired so long as they can be opened with standard-issue software (e.g., .txt). Submissions will be posted to the fimfiction account http://www.fimfiction.net/user/fic+Write+off, so if you want formatting, it must be done with mark-up recognised by fimfiction’s story editor. Your submission email should include the title of your story and your name (and of course your story).
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>> No. 93184
>>92924
Eventually. Will require a lot of work first.
>> No. 93185
I'll be putting my story up on ED soon enough, when I've added some sections and tightened the writing a bit.
>> No. 93207
>>93185
Please use "EqD."

"ED" is why one takes Viagra.


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76932 No. 76932 [View]
OK, we have the "Colt-cuddler" thread, and most MLP ship fics are lesbian, so how about a thread for straight ships? I made this thread a while back, but it done died on me. So, what's the best Straight shipping fics? I'll start:

It's Always Sunny In Fillydelphia. Well written shipping, very believable.

http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/06/story-its-always-sunny-in-fillydelphia.html
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>> No. 80042
This is probably going to start a whole world of hate, but here, have some M/F second person fics. The first two are mine, the last two are by TheGentlemanCreeper. They're all pretty long.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/64/Homecoming - Royal Guard x Cheerilee
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/1061/Drunken-Lullabies - Bartender x Berry Punch
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/1487/Healing-Dash - Doctor x Rainbow Dash
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/1500/Freudian-Slip - Shrink x Rarity
>> No. 80225
At home on the Range updated!

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/4686/3/At-Home-on-the-Range/3.-Swimming-Lessons
>> No. 93202
>>77104
:D
I'm the writer of Give it a Go, and I was looking through my referrals and I saw ponychan. So I looked. Thanks for sharing mah story man! I'm really happy you thought it was good enough to share lol


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Herp derp I write horrible fanfic.


Pony-Life: Halfway to Friendship

ATUHOR'S NOSE:
sense evrything is better with pony I decide to write story with ponys based on best story ever Quarter-Life Halfway to Distruaction.

CHAPTER ONE: WHAT IT MEANS
Twilight Sparkrer was studying in her was studying librararied.
Fellow pony cow-orker Derpy Hoves said "Twilight Spargle what are you working on"
"UI have discovered new fiar-breething dragin but it is so vollatile that it does not have a dragon-life but pony-life so we must observe with hasty"
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>> No. 93158
I decided to mix it up a bit and incorporated elements from Fallout Equestria. Goddesses help us.

Pony-Life: Hero Beggining

In the future Equestria was dark and scarry. One day Zebras came and noone knew why. Zebras were pony things that werent pones with ugly faces and sometimes glowing eyes and slaved ponys in the city and made them angry and sad. LittlePip Sparkle who was living in the city and with her mom said "mom why are Zebras here" and she said "LittlePip Sparkle Zebras are from science and outter space and hate pones."
LittlePip Sparkle realy hated Zebbras because they beat up every pony and LittlePip Sparkle hated it. "mom why are they beating up that filly!" LittlePip Sparkle said to her mom. "Because she is pone LittlePip Sparkle, and they are evil Zebras" LittlePip Sparkles mom said back.
"Hey you Zebras stop beating her up you evil guys!" LittlePip Sparkle yelled loud at them. "Shut up foal or you will pay!" the Zebras said and aimed there lazer guns at LittlePip SSparklz head. "Zebras dont aim your lazers!" yelled mom then the Zebras shot her and laughed "Ha ha stupid pone girl with no head" they said with smiles.
LittlePip Sparkle grabed her moms hoof and said "mom you were beautiful soul and Zebras will pay." "LittlePip Sparkle no get out of here fast as you can..." LittlePip Sparkles mom said and died. Then LittlePip Sparkle grabed a wepon and shot the Zebras in the heart and said "this is not over."
The ponys around LittlePip Sparkle cheerd and smiled and said "good job LittlePip Sparkle we hate those Zebras!" Zebras made poneys fraid and when LittlePip Sparkle killed them it gave them hop.
"Zebras we are not scarred no more!" said LittlePip Sparkle and every pony around LittlePip Sparkle said "YEAH!" and grabed lazer guns and rocks. LittlePip Sparkle and the ponis walked fast like waves and went towards to the Zebra tower that was big like the sky.
"Where do you pone think you are going?" a big Zebra army with lots of dragons said.
"To send you back to science and outter space!
>> No. 93163
Here it is. The end of an era. Now we see what really happened to Twilight Sparkle.


Pony-Life Full-pony Consequences: Free Pony

John Sparkle backfliped out of the sky and landed besides LittlePip Sparkle. LittlePip Sparkle looked at John Sparkle in the eyes and cry falled out and said "Dad mom has dead". John Sparkle went sad at the ground then moved head real fast up.
"ZEBRAS YOU KILLD WIFE?" John Sparkle said with growls.
"Yes John Sparkle" the dark pony said after "LittlePip Sparkles mom is shot in head" the dark pony said again.
"I loved wife like sun raise... DARK PONY YOU WILL SUFFAR!" John Sparkle ponted and yelled.
John Sparkle jumpd in to sky with kicks and hit dark pony and the dark ponys mask ript off and John Sparkle seed ugly Zebra face but it looked like pony tooo. the dark pony scrumbled back to Zebras and Zebras went to shoot John Sparkle but LittlePip Sparkle throwed granaid for John Sparkle to shot them in faces.
"Dauter take ponies and leave the city its time I have to kill the enemys and make evil go away from here forrest of time!" John Sparkle said to LittlePip Sparkle and ponies.
"John Sparkle we fight!" ponies said and didnt go no where.
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93167
>>74060
As long as people keep the thread going with relevant talk and actual material, it's cool with me.


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65451 No. 65451 [View] [Last 50 posts]
In the old thread, it was decided that the first fic that we should do this to is the original Conversion Bureau fic, instead of the one originally planned. So, here goes.

This is the definition of MST: MSTing is a method of mocking a show in the style of the television series Mystery Science Theater 3000 (MST3K) and, in particular, is a form of fan fiction in which writers mock other works by inserting humorous comments, called "riffs", into the flow of dialogue and events."

What I'm going to do is make a Google Doc with the above-mentioned fic in it. Said doc will be open for comments(I can't open it up for group editing as someone could delete everything if they wanted to). Anyone that comments on a line of the fic with the name they want to be known by, and their comment, will have their comment added into the document in bold text, slowly creating a group MST. Example:

"However, some people have shown some second thoughts. People like Ethan McCullough."
Anonymous1: Our Stu for the evening.

The doc is here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ERvIakzNX5y1zeIgLYZZKVtAYO8d6_YQNVHl9CK_WMM/edit?hl=en_US
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>> No. 93060
New thread, new update. Seems fitting.
>> No. 93122
>>93120
>> No. 98216
This is godlike! :o


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92769 No. 92769 [View]
#Author #Reviewer #Single fic #Crossover #Adventure
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/7526/Sweetie%27s-Mansion
When a mansion appears out of nowhere in the outskirts of town, The Mane 6, are all invited to a housewarming by Specter Yield, the owner of the strange mansion. Hours after they leave to attend the party, the Cutie Mark Crusaders find themselves in this mansion. Eventually, Sweetie Belle finds herself alone in this massive mansion, trying to save her friends, and discovering the truth behind this haunted mansion. Will she be able to rescue her friends... and possibly all of Equestria from the ghostly presence?
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>>92798
Hey, I told him how to delete his thread (although that's only because the report function is down right now, otherwise I would've told him to use the FAQ XD ).
We should add a description of the tags to the bottom post of the sticky...
>> No. 100511
>>100000
>> No. 100513
>>99999


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43232 No. 43232 [View] [Last 50 posts]
PLEASE READ BEFORE POSTING

Attention, newcomers to /fic/ and those unfamiliar with common posting protocol! This sticky contains the basic guidelines, suggestions and tips for posting here as well as guides and links for helping you to improve your writing. Follow the guide and you will find your stay far more enjoyable and productive!

The Ponychan Fan-Fiction Five Step Review List
  1. We strive to keep the /fic/ board running smoothly and fairly. To make sure all writers have an equal chance to get their first works noticed, reviewed, and commented upon, we suggest that your first post be done on an established review thread.
  2. If your work deserves someone else’s attention, it deserves your attention first. Make sure you have run the text through a spell-check and grammar-check if at all possible. A poorly edited story will make the reviewer’s job that much more difficult, and you may not like what you get back.
  3. Be polite. You want your work to be reviewed, right? So does everyone else who is posting. Post once on a thread, and give it time. If the thread is already on the front page, consider ‘saging’, which keeps the thread from bumping up. This is done by putting sage in the email field of your post.
  4. Looking for a particular fic you just can’t seem to find? There’s several archives where readers can find fics and for authors to know there's a stable location for their work (see below).
  5. In order to prevent anyone from seeing something they don't want to see, please use the subject field to notify others when a story contains shipping or grimdark (stories that involve death, famine, plagues etc.)
Full guide: The New Fan-Fiction Writer’s Guide

Fan-Fiction Archives
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88528
DO NOT POST STORIES IN THIS THREAD. That's not what it is for. Before posting, see if one of the generals has what you want:
>>79400 Story Idea General (The Story Forge)
>>88527 Recommendation/Request General
>>86726 The "Ask An EqD Pre-Reader Anything" Thread
>>66666 Guide to Making a /fic/ Story Presentation Thread

Post your story in a review thread if you are seeking feedback or criticism. (see the list of review threads: http://derpy.me/S1nFp or the list of reviewers: http://bit.ly/rtOSx7)
Want to be listed as a reviewer? Email Twilight Snarkle. His email can be found on this list: http://bit.ly/rWZr4z

While the suggestions in this thread are not hard rules (the mods won't ban you for making a new thread), they are strong suggestions. If you want constructive criticism, posting your story in a review thread is the most reliable way to get it. If you want to show off your story, include tags/synopsis in your thread's OP.
>> No. 90437
Tags: [Comedy][Shipping][Human]

Synopsis: A human is transported into a Ponyville by a bolt of lightning. Ponyville has never seen anything like it before and avoid it, afraid of his stature. With the help of the Mane 6 and Spike, the human must earn Ponyville's friendship until a way back home is found.

Links:
Part I- Arrival
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/13537/1/Equestria%27s-First-Human/Part-I--Arrival
Part II- Introductions
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/13537/2/Equestria%27s-First-Human/Part-II--Introductions

Comments/requests:
Here's the pre-reader's comment:
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92551
DO NOT POST STORIES IN THIS THREAD. That's not what it is for. Before posting, see if one of the generals has what you want:
>>91817 Story Idea General (The Story Forge)
>>88527 Recommendation/Request General
>>92343 The "Ask An EqD Pre-Reader Anything" Thread
>>66666 Guide to Making a /fic/ Story Presentation Thread

Post your story in a review thread if you are seeking feedback or criticism. (see the list of review threads: http://derpy.me/S1nFp or the list of reviewers: http://bit.ly/rtOSx7)
Want to be listed as a reviewer? Email Twilight Snarkle. His email can be found on this list: http://bit.ly/rWZr4z

While the suggestions in this thread are not hard rules (the mods won't ban you for making a new thread), they are strong suggestions. If you want constructive criticism, posting your story in a review thread is the most reliable way to get it. If you want to show off your story, include tags/synopsis in your thread's OP.


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92196 No. 92196 [View]
#Author #Discussion
Because I have an idea for one, though it ends badly. Oh, and don't think that I end it with murder like every other fanfic out there, it just ends with a wicked bad argument and then some looking back, maybe with some looking back, it may be something else.

Oh, and don't think the image relates to the shipping, it has nothing to do with it.
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>> No. 92418
>>92410
Are those two all that different? The only difference is that un- anyway, right?
>> No. 92456
>>92418
'Unholy ritual that requires a sacrifice' implies that there is only one sacrifice to be made.
>> No. 92522
I'm deathly afraid of posting anything about the ending I have planned.

I'm not a fan of happy lovey-dovey endings. I'm not a fan of 'boohoo tragedy' ending either. What I tend to like is some middle ground in which things don't go badly, but the characters find acceptance, or closure in the events. Ex: "My pappy died, but I'll every time I take up a chisel I'll think of his smiling face, guiding my hoof as I carve."

Bittersweet is the word I'm looking for. Lovey dovey and boohoo tragedy both tend to have a 'cop out' feel if they aren't done right. It really depends on the fic though. I'm a huge fan of self discovery and conflict shipping (such as in romance reports and flying high, falling hard).


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50865 No. 50865 [View]
Let's all pretend for a second like I'm important enough to have my own writing thread on /fic/. Since people complained, I'll start posting all my second drafts here for feedback, review, etc. from now on.

To start with, I'll use this opening post to introduce myself via what I've already done. Feel free to take a gander at any of these if you want to see where I've been. New stuff will happen in the replies.

Last note: I AM ALWAYS OPEN FOR FEEDBACK. I take feedback on completed stories (anything on EQD) and critique on anything that isn't completed. That's why I come here, after all.

[Comedy] Present Tense: http://goo.gl/dfhKP
When Twilight needs help translating a book, she gets caught up in the madcap antics of a lovesick pegasus. (Warning: Gratuitous author insert.)

[Normal] Testamintin': http://goo.gl/VeCRV
The last will and testament of Pinkie Pie's grandmother.
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>> No. 92335
>>92277
Thank you, Fluttermod. <3

>>92298
It definitely won't go over well with a wide audience, but I'm beyond caring about that at this point.

As to your criticisms, I'm kind of not following, apart from needing to start in medias res, which is not a bad idea at all. The order of revelation is something I'll keep in mind. What did you mean by 'being mocked', though? I'm just not understanding what you're getting at with the first three paragraphs.
>> No. 92458
>>92335

I've read the occasional story by someone self-consciously "definitely not a brony," and that's the impression I got: a visceral suspicion that the story was written as a Take That directed at my people.

I'm sure that wasn't your intention (you're one of us (TM) after all), but it's how it struck me.
>> No. 92463
>>92458
Huhhh...

Not intentional, I assure you. I'm not above mocking the fandom, but I certainly don't think we're all crazy bums. :V Given the conversation I've had elsewhere about this story tonight, this is enlightening. Many thanks for your feedback.


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#Reviewer #Training Grounds
*pant, cough* Wait up, everyone! I ran... *wheeze* ran here as fast as I could and--*haaack*--Does anyone have water?! You do? Give it to me!

...Sorry about that. Greetings all, and welcome to the Training Grounds, the review thread for all authors, reviewers, proofreaders, and editors, both newcomer and seasoned veteran. It isn’t the only such thread, but it’s usually the busiest!

How to submit a fic/find your review: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsHowTo
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>> No. 91786
Title: Blazing Run through the Animal Kingdom
Name: Arby Works/Mr. Masato
E-Mail: [email protected]
Tags: [Normal][Adventure]

Synopsis: "Four performers, one being the Great and Powerful Trixie, embark on a quest to the nation of Great Caulk, north of Equestria. One half of the nation, the Tropical Animal Kingdom area is run by Giraffes whilst the northern half, the winter wonderland is run by canines. When the Giraffe's national treasures are stolen, the Canine monarchs are framed and Trixie and her new band of show stopping performers must clear the name of the Canine monarchs before war breaks out.

Part 1 of the "Dazzling Tales of the Great and Powerful Trixie" Trilogy; set before the Apple Spectrum."

Links:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/15742/Blazing-Run-through-the-Animal-Kingdom
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7929303/1/Blazing_Run_through_the_Animal_Kingdom
>> No. 92351
Tags: [Dark][Adventure][Alternate Universe][Sci-fi]

Title:Timepony

Author: Jazzyfeather

Synopsis: Awoken in the middle of the night Twilight Sparkle is summoned by Princess Celestia. The Princess wants to send her on a quest for 5 objects. 5 objects that are meant to save Equestria from certain doom by an unknown force. Will she manage it in time to save the world and her friends?

Link: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/13250/TimePony

Please review both chapters if possible
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