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#Normal #Sad
Prologue: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jXpLD7WxoudFlDAeVOiBCS8PjMfi4BQDBKfBeqtcLfY/edit?pli=1

Chapter 1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rOjAF5KHfcUUncvLthaqZxmSx7FmYtZgoLEJFdl1Xw8/edit?pli=1

Could someone please proofread this and post a review? It's my first real attempt at pony fanfiction (and is incomplete so far); one of its mane characters is the "alicorn filly" that briefly appears in Lesson Zero, which was written off as an animation error by the producers, but which intrigued me enough to write a story about it. :)

Also, for those who are curious, numbers such as "229 BRS", "1 BRS", and "25 YRS" refer to a dating system I'm using in the fanfic, where 229 BRS means "229 years before the Princesses began their rule", 25 YRS means "25 years into the rule of the Princess(es)", etc; BRS being the pony version of BC/BCE, and YRS the equivalent of AD/CE. According to my system, Twilight Sparkle moved to Ponyville in 1025 YRS.
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>> No. 89893
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Since you have asked for help on improving your fanfiction, I highly recommend that you peruse the thread at the top of the page (>>43232), which contains valuable information on the best ways of getting help on /fic/. The short of it: most reviewers use “review threads” for this purpose (see http://derpy.me/S1nFp)

The long: many who give extensive constructive criticism prefer to use "review threads" to make it easier to find stories and give them feedback. The reason for this lies in the sheer number of visitors to /fic/ who want their fanfiction read and given constructive criticism. If every visitor to the board made a thread with the sole purpose of asking for help on improving their writing, it would be extremely difficult to locate and give help to authors; older threads would be crowded away with every new thread that is posted. Furthermore, it would become a war for attention; only the visitors who most zealously "bump" their own threads by posting in them would be displayed prominently, while threads made by other visitors would be left to flounder. Earlier in the history of /fic/, the board was very much like this.

In a review thread, all written works are put into in a single easy-to-find place, and thus are each more likely to garner views and feedback. Furthermore, the larger collaborative review threads (and many of the smaller "private" individually-maintained threads as well) maintain lists of recently-posted works in the thread that have yet to receive feedback. Granted, this often means you will have to wait longer, but it also means that it is more or less guaranteed to be read.

Welcome to /fic/! I wish you all the best in improving your story and writing skills through constructive criticism.
>> No. 89959
Thanks for the advice, I'll be sure to do that :)
>> No. 89975
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Please delete your thread since you're getting a review from a thread.

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New Story. The idea came to me so strongly I just had to begin writing it right away. Prologue and first chapter. Really short, but it should pick up soon. Mild Grimdark warning. Not horror, but tragedy. Also shipping. I think the links should work.

It should be obvious what this fic is based off now. But I'm hoping to do a little messing around with it still to make it interesting.

Prologue - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Q04-1YCN_X1ozS47pplXgq9N1SPWKUZUyzmJQlckqtc/edit?hl=en_US

Alpha - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bKxRuJtj4J4ctEnUWiuqTWj8UO_VhGbMsUDnDCIkUUA/edit?hl=en_US
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Kappa - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1r_Bw-n0k1XWSpxYVCQRzpQ1JrdpGeF772AbZ_FyjR8k/edit?hl=en_US

I'm taking a break until the episode Read it and Weep airs. Both because school's coming soon and I have other writing projects that need some love, and because I'm interested in the ramifications some of the more recent, and future episodes have and want to spend some time thinking about new directions the fic can take due to them.
>> No. 77315
Apparently Kappa was broken. Fixed now.
>> No. 89953
Sorry about the long wait.

Lambda - https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cfl6jEJPtaieuBhfxOIb16HroVaXRP8GsUeI6uSD64k/edit

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89378 No. 89378 [View]
Now that the write-off is over, I figured some discussion of the winners and losers might be in order. Since I know a lot of authors here competed, what did you think of the winners? And what were some stories that didn't make the cut which you enjoyed?

To see all the stories, go here: http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=group&group=364

Personally, I really liked Homecoming (http://www.fimfiction.net/story/11746/Homecoming), and was impressed that it managed to wedge in all three prompts and still be a funny story.
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>> No. 89606

>I'm responding to the OP, and no one can stop me!

Honestly, I didn't much care for the third place entry. Making fun of crappy self-inserts is like shooting fish in a barrel, and there were kind of a lot of spelling mistakes, even in the parts that weren't supposed to be crappily edited. The first and second place stories I both thought were great--I guess Swiper didn't find them when he was reading.
>> No. 89607
Fan names tend to lack creativity because it's the lowest common denominator which becomes popular. The official names tend to be either clever puns or descriptive of some aspect of the character. Fan names usually are what ever first comes to mind.

>No offense, bro, but you have sucky taste in pony material.
He made two statements and that's enough to judge his ability to judge?
>> No. 89675
I seem to remember someone commenting that they couldn't find a shortlist from the competition, so I did a tiny bit of digging. Enjoy.


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85169 No. 85169 [View]
#Discussion #Just for fun
- Have to stop yourself from writing “hoof” instead of “hand” when writing about people
- Read other fiction and automatically wonder what a given character's cutie mark is
- Ignore when the words “anypony”, “everypony”, and “pegasus” are marked as incorrect by your word processor
- Watch every new episode wondering if it'll debunk your story or your favorite story's "canon"

Anyone else have more?
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Oh, and I forgot the most important one:

- Telling people to omit something within already-sent messages or posts that have already been made, when... you can't omit something that's etched in stone.
>> No. 89227
...when you write something in your head as humans and make them ponies at the end.

Goodness. I haven't heard of anyone doing that, even on #ttg.
>> No. 89256
>When you find yourself writing out rough drafts during the monthly staff meeting.
Done, just today actually.

>When you write up a "I will never write..." list,only to come back a few months later and discover that a dangerous number of items have to be removed.

I promies myself to never write HiE (or read for that matter) and now I'm planning the second. (and reading the third.)
And I still dislike the concept!

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86413 No. 86413 [View]
#Discussion #Writing Exercise
For a little writing and character exercise, I thought I'd ask everyone here to tell us, in character, how your favorite pony likes their tea. If they don't like tea, tell us why, and then tell us what they do prefer to drink - whether it's coffee, hot cocoa, lemonade, cider, or what-have-you.
I'll be providing my own post in a little bit, once I've locked all these end-users in a warehouse and set it alight. I mean, once work has slowed down.
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Ah, tea, how delectable. I've been served the finest teas in Equestria by my beloved subjects, but none of them ever came close to the so called "forbidden" tea grown by some of my favorite tea farmers in the dark, using magic. That is truly the way nature intended it to be in this world of ours where even the sun itself is a contrivance brought forth by magic.
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A simple bag inna hot water with a splash o' milk is just dandy. I don't know what else there is to say 'bout me an' tea, but m'grandson, against all my chidin', has a strange habit o' chewin' the bag 'till it's tasteless that I don't understand.

I s'pose it's arbitrary manners anyway, but who'd do such a thing for an herb that gets more bitter the longer y' have it in hot water? I mean, when somethin's done it's done and its time has come. Ain't no reason to prolong and draw it out 'till it's so weak it's got no character left in it at all. Is it that the little taste o' the leaf reminds my grandson o' the fresh tea that he knew earlier? Or is he tryin' to get some new flavor outta the bitter old leaves that he couldn't get from the tea? Either way, he seems mighty obsessed with gettin' evr'last bit o' life out of them leaves, the way he nurses 'em in his mouth before they're finally dead of flavor, and he spits 'em out.

Bumping with another ham-fisted attempt at allegory.
>> No. 89139
Oh, every now and then I like to brew a tubful of tea and bathe in it!
I used to drink the tea while in the tub too, but then I remembered what else I was drinking.
Still worth drinking out of the tub though. I mean, it's not everyday you get a tubful of tea!

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82910 No. 82910 [View]
#Single fic
Her heart raced as she hurtled towards the edge. As she neared her impending death, she began to pray for a miracle; anything to save her.
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>> No. 89111
Dash suddenly found herself inside a gigantic pool of green liquid, glancing about to see nopony else around. "Well, that wasn't fun," she remarked.
>> No. 89114
Then Rainbow Dash bought Pinkie a calculator.

Then Pinkie accidentally the universe.
>> No. 89131
Pinkie intentionally remade the universe a moment afterward. "After all," she said, bouncing about inside the horrible, stinky liquid over to Dash, "no universe would mean no more parties!"

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88860 No. 88860 [View]
#Single fic #Normal #Sad
Hey guys, don't know if I'm doing this right at all, but I made a fanfic after listening to some depressing music. This is the first one I've ever done, and first post I've made, so apologies if it's out of place.
This is pretty sad (at least for me) so if you have a light heart I wouldn't advise reading it.

It was an overcast day in Ponyville, a gray haze
hanging on the horizon. The roads of the town were empty, there were no markets open, nor a filly in the playing on the street, nor a pegasus in the sky. The breeze blew calmly over the fields of grass, carrying with it a letter riddled with ink, the writings of one certain unircorn. The gust brought the letter to the ground, settling the paper down easily under an apple tree. The letter read,
"Dear Rainbow Dash, I'm sorry I haven't been writing as much as I used to. I've been busy attending matters which the Princess can't trouble with. I hope you understand. Remember so long ago when I would stress for ages on the smallest issues concerning Celestia? Ha, you should see me now, with all this responsibility on my shoulders. I'll admit at times, I think of what you would do in my shoes, and what Pinkie would do, and Applejack, and Rarity, and Fluttershy. It helps me a lot, and I still miss you guys. I heard Rarity got named best designer in all of Equestria! Isn't that amazing? I'm glad to hear she's doing well away from home, but I wonder if she still thinks of us...The things we did together, the sights we saw, the lessons we learned. I think of Applejack in Appleoosa, and wonder the same thing. I think of how Pinkie and Shy are doing back in Ponyville, at least they get to support eachother still. I think of Spike, and how he's doing with the dragons. I still hear from him every now and then. And I think about you, Dash. I mean, you're a Wonderbolt now! That was your dream, all the times you would tell me about some new trick you were practicing to show them how 'awesome' yo
>> No. 88862
First thing's first: it would be way easier to read if you put additional line breaks between your paragraphs. Once you've gotten it cleaned up, it might make a nice addition to our short story compilation thread (>>50615, whose link has sadly disappeared from the sticky).

Also, while it may seem like overkill, you'll be able to edit it in-place if you put it in a Google doc.
>> No. 88863
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>ey guys, don't know if I'm doing this right at all
You're not.

1) You did not read the sticky.
2) Your formatting is quite bad. The middle is a difficult-to-read text wall, and your finger seems to have developed a mind of its own and hit the Enter key a few times when it shouldn't have.

For a single-fic made by a newbie, it was not nearly as bad as I thought it would be. It failed to pluck even a single string of my heart, but I managed to finish it with a minimum of skimming, which was a point in your favour.

Yes, it would be greatly appreciated if you deleted this thread and posted this in the general. The Short Story thread could use some new material in either case.
Also, Gdocs is easily your best tool for writing. I highly suggest you familiarize yourself with its workings.

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88704 No. 88704 [View]
Yeah, we're doing this again. After a long hiatus, too. But this time, things are going to be a bit different.

I'm not going to go too in-depth in critiquing your concept. I'll comment on it, sure, but I'm really not the best with concepts.

What I will review, however, is your prose and dialogue. And I will review that in-depth.

So here's how this is going to work. You are going to make a post in this thread if you want a review. You are going to include the following things:

>Name of Fic
>Author's name
>Brief description
>Tags (Note: I don't review shipping stories. Sorry.)
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>> No. 88769


Now my enthusiasm's all dried up. Maybe I'll do something about it tomorrow...
>> No. 89889
Are you still planning on reviewing my story? You've made a few comments on the doc a few days ago, but you haven't continued since. Just wanted to check in, and make sure that you haven't dropped off the side of the Earth.
>> No. 90330
It should be noted that I've requested a second reviewer, Mintyrest, to review my work in your absence. I'd still like to hear your opinion, but just be aware that there may be unresolved comments made by Minty on the doc.

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38631 No. 38631 [View] [Last 50 posts]
Old one auto-saged, so here we go again!
This is the official discussion of "The Sun is Tired," a fanfic I wrote.
It's sort of a deconstruction of trollestia, and sort of my idea of what is going on in the show. Or, at least, the premise is.
I might post parts early, I might not. This is the easiest way to contact me, so go ahead and post. Also, fanart and other things like that make me a very happy author, and get you every single link early. But only do it if you actually like the story.
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>> No. 88709
I think this was the tripcode... Not sure.
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You got it.
>> No. 88731
Also, in other news...

If you look for my deviant art, there will be a non-pony-related short story up on there sometime today.

So check that out.

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Any fics that take place in the real world that you could recommend to a pony?
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>> No. 88725

you can find everything you need in the above thread. you're welcome enjoy your stay... I'm out of muffins so I guess Anon Derpy will come and give you one.
>> No. 88726
heh, you weren't kidding

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#Discussion #Random
What the hay happened to FimFiction?
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>> No. 88606
And now story comments are randomly going missing.
>> No. 88611
Things still seem Discord-ed
>> No. 88625
Looks like that place is screwed.

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87963 No. 87963 [View]
Took a break last week but now I'm back! I've been running a livestream on which I review and discuss fics. This is event 4 and It's been pretty successful so far!

Same thing this week: post up to TWO chapters of your fic and on Saturday at 3:30pm EST/12:30 PST I will review them live! I'd like to review as many as possible so keep your total word count under 8000. If you have one longer chapter or not many people post here, I'll be lenient with the length.

Stream: www.livestream.com/somethingabout20percent

Why should you have your fic reviewed on a livestream you ask?
1. Live reviews are very thorough. I will say every little thing that comes into my head that I think will be useful. I go over the chapter several times to make sure I said everything I could.
2. You can interact with me. Whenever I get confused or have a question, I'll ask. Whenever you have a question, I'll answer it right there. If you want to explain something, you can.
3. You can throw ideas around and have some immediate feedback on them! Last week the authors and I talked quite a bit.
4. You can learn from other authors as well! You can watch me review other fics as well and pick up on things I point out.
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I should have given alternate contact info seeing as clop/gorefics aren't allow here. My bad.

Delete your post and then email the link to [email protected]
>> No. 88446
Why do I keep throwing this unfinished, undescriptive draft around?

Anyways, this is short. Please review it, and the "bonus rewrite", which wasn't written by me. (I'm actually putting this here because of the awful rewrite thing, but I do like reviews, too.)

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To all authors and other people curious about today's stream, here's a link to the video of it:


Good time was had by all. I'll be deleting this thread soon and posting a new one for next week's stream on Thursday.

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43456 No. 43456 Autosaged [View] [Last 50 posts]
In the spirit of organization:

Well, here is a thread for people to post their recommendations so new people can get a general picture of the highlights of fiction in the fandom.

Couple of rules.
1.) No self-promotion, your work should stand for itself and make others want to refer to it.
2.) You will provide tags and some small additional information for people to know what they are heading into.


1.) Do post on this thread and promoted works that deserve the attention.
2.) If you see a person asking for recommendations direct them here and ask them to delete their thread.
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>> No. 88529
New thread: >>88527
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>> No. 88530
Well, that was embarassing.
>> No. 88532
Pobody's nerfect.

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88493 No. 88493 [View]
#Single fic #Normal #Shipping
So it's nowhere near done but I need feedback, sorry if you seen this before but dunno if it sent and I just noticed my email was wrong so what do you people think?
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>> No. 88498
Also, don't upload .DOCs directly to Ponychan...
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>Beaten to the punch

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88491 No. 88491 Locked [View]
#Single fic #Normal #Crossover #Random #Shipping
Okay it's nowhere near done and I don't want t osend it over to equestria daily or FIMFiction just yet I need feedback, comments, if it's good, bad, ugly, if its worth while finishing, anypony interested? I'll in fill on where its going if anypony wants to know too just shout :D
>> No. 88497
...in the Training Grounds in order to get a better response.
>> No. 88499
...it's harder for people to read, and also poses a security risk.
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