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87641 No. 87641 [View]
... your serial reviewer closes their queue? I'm over 60k words in, most of which has been published. I don't want to just dump that on another reviewer and essentially tell them "yeah, I need the latest chapters reviewed, but I can't really change anything from the first fifty thousand words..."

what do, /fic/?
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>> No. 88459
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Layers of implication there.

But I'm sure another nightmare group editing job will come around, crushing everyone's wills yet again.
>> No. 88487
Like working at the local Big Box Mart, sometimes you have to take a less-desirable job before you have the references needed to move onto bigger, better things.

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88396 No. 88396 [View]
Hey guys, im trying to get ahold of a book on fim fiction called Crystalline. Apparently the book has been deleted from there site and I am wondering if anyone has a copy of it that I can download

love and tolerance

Tuesday Fraulein
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Try that.
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Thank you for you patronage

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88078 No. 88078 [View]
Been looking but all ive ever found is dragoon legacy.
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>> No. 88269
Hah, the whole Winter Realm got like Pay-Per-View porn.
>> No. 88346
>Sex with a force of nature
Who's having sex with the Scout?!
>> No. 88365
training day by coffeebean lol

its humanized clop though so I cant link it.

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88338 No. 88338 [View]
#Single fic #Normal

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>> No. 88353
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Needs more words.
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>Me walking away from this thread
>> No. 88364
Heh i thought you would be a person that would blow up a thread and dance on its debris. Laughing

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76843 No. 76843 [View]

i made a guide for producing almost-publication-quality characters from scratch.

what do all of you fellows think of it
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>> No. 76886

I don't see why you'd get banned, not like /rp/ isn't open to people helping out. We do have some OC guides already, so you might wanna make sure a current one doesn't make posting it redundant.

Anyway, I think it's solid, although I do have something I wanna say about this part:

>There’s even the possibility of them not being a pony at all, but keep in mind that doing so will require you to very thoroughly explain why this non pony creature is anywhere near ponies, and how the two cultures intersect or not. For instance a griffin (judging by what we have seen) would be rude and headstrong, and ponies would have an initial bias of curiosity or apprehension about them.

While a character's species is definitely taken into account, as that will affect their abilities and how they perceive the world and are in turn perceived, the way it's phrased now implies that every member of a certain non-pony species must act in a certain way. That's not to say one should not take culture into account, but people are people and people are not all the same. Also, remember that it's a bad idea to extrapolate from one to infinity.
>> No. 76889

To add onto that, the extrapolation part, you have to remember that most of the show takes place around Ponyville, and we only see a small fraction of the world. We see Gilda, yes, but Gilda is one griffon; you can't claim with any certainty that all griffons are like Gilda. In the same vein, we see that the ponies in Ponyville are really skittish and not very well informed, but Ponyville is one town, and a small one at that. A pony from somewhere else, especially a more metropolitan area, may have a vastly different reaction to these sorts of things. Of course, this is all just fanon, as ponies and griffons and whatever may all be like that everywhere in the FiM universe, but if you're working with OCs you're working with fanon anyway, and people tend to find how the world works in our world more believable, so that's something to take into consideration.
>> No. 77200
might as well age this

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87539 No. 87539 [View]
#Discussion #Random
The subject says it all. I'll go first.

You know you're reading/reviewing a troll-fic when you're 4 paragraphs in and you have yet to see a single sentence that's passable as-is.
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>> No. 87742
Oh god not shed.mov
>> No. 87781
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I rather enjoyed that one, actually...
>> No. 87782
I enjoyed the song!

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87559 No. 87559 [View]
Okay, so I finally just finished Fallout Equestria and it was pretty damn amazing. I wont call it my favorite, but it was amazing regardless. Anyway I am not sure this is even the right board for this but I figured I would ask and for those who havent read, beware spoilers.

[spoiler] So Littlepip goes into the SPP to clear the sky, cool that much I got. 10 years later, can she go in and out of that thing now? Because they almost made it sound like she could see Homage in person, or is she just using old pre-war technology to communicate with her? I dont know if I missed the answer to this somewhere in the Afterward but I was just curios. I really anted to see a happy ending for her I guess... [spoiler]
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>> No. 87578
So sad.

OP, you should ask this in the Fallout General. You can find it by using the Search Threads function near the top right-hand corner of the page
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Since the Fallout General isn't labelled the Fallout General, here's a link. >>84499 I think this is what Ion-Sturm meant.
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87238 No. 87238 [View]
Well, I've been around this board for a bit now and I've realized something. At best my work needs an editor, and at it's worst it needs an undertaker. So why not use my gifts to review stories?

Keep getting pestered by Equestria Daily? Too many views? I can help by making your story worse!

So how does this work? Basically like any review thread. Post your link on google docs and give thealltimegreat7 at gmail dot com commenting power. Boom, your views will evaporate.

1. No gore or clop please. Shipping's fine though.
2. I reserve the right to choose the order of my cue.
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>> No. 87521
My mistake, I put it into Trots McCLure's thread ( >>78309 ).
He quite enjoyed it.
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Go back to reviewing, Ryonne, I miss you...
>> No. 87604
>Go back to reviewing
Or don't

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85147 No. 85147 [View] [Last 50 posts]
#Reviewer #Training Grounds
Greetings all, and welcome to the Training Grounds, the review thread for all authors, reviewers,
proofreaders, and editors, both newcomer and seasoned veteran. It isn’t the only such thread,
but it’s usually the busiest!

How to submit a fic/find your review: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsHowTo
Casual TL/DR of above guide: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsTLDR
The current list of fanfics: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsQueue
The submission form: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsSubmit
IRC (live chat) howto and rules: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsIRC-Howto
Previous edition of The Training Grounds: >>80754 The sticky (contains important information): >>43232

Some Notes
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The password sold me. I'll take it. =)
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Well, I've only read the prologue so far, and I'm really liking it. You do have some grammar issues that are slowing me down, but I'm ignoring the little ones, like you asked.

The overall story is interesting to me. I do want to see what happens next. I'm not sure what you wanted to do with detail vs. bogging down reader, but I found that your most detailed part - the Clover study scene - was your best part. In fact, what threw me off was how you transitioned from that level of detail and then threw me some directional lines that didn't make sense. You spend 3-4 paragraphs on how hard she is studying, then in 30 words or less, she talks with the librarian; disagrees with the librarian; is persuaded by the librarian; goes out side; sees some weird jade thing and the story ends.

The letters are really killing it for me. They seem melodramatic for no particular reason. Okay, Celestia is writing some letters to her mom. Great, but why? I realize they have some secret, but that's not built up very well. I think you need to add the same level of detail to those letters as you did with Clover's studying. Don't just jump into the letter and assume the reader is going to read them with the tension they are meant to be read with.

Platinum's outrage-speech seems off. I didn't see her as Rarity.

The librarian was awesome.

The random jade, I'm not sure what that even is, was random. I'm not sure what the significance of that is, but if you are looking to tie that into the plot later as foreshadowing, you need to add more than that.
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87362 No. 87362 [View]
#Single fic #Sad #Slice of Life
Sweetie Belle's Secret
Sad, Slice of Life

Sweetie Belle comes to grips with being a fillyfooler. She faces the challenges of being in school, worrying about what her classmates and friends will think. She has to deal with the bullying that follows, even from friends she never expected to turn on her. How far will it drive her to go and how will she deal with the troubles of a school age kid dealing with coming out?

Authors Note: I have not yet found a story in which one of the school age children of the show has to deal with problems like these but it is the school age when it is most difficult. I hope to use this as a tool to reach out to LGBT and LGBTQ teens who may have to deal with similar problems and to try my best to represent the difficulties of this situation to those who otherwise wouldn't understand.

Story URL: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/13070/Sweetie-Belle%27s-Secret
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Thank you a ton for the help. Although I seem thickheaded I actually appreciate it all. The tense will be fixed by tomorrow (no guarantee on all punctuation though) and hopefully I will be able to impress you with my second chapter and prologue. I will tell you when I have more to critique. Thank's again. (wow I'm being unusually nice on the internet, must be gay :P)
>> No. 87468
A few more pieces of advice:
-If you want to post without bumping the thread, put "sage" in the email box.
-Using a name helps us keep you separate from all the other anons.
-If you're looking for critique and help with improvement, your best bet is to post in a review thread. >>87426 has the appropriate links. Make sure to read your chosen thread's rules on submissions, and it's a good idea to check some of their other reviews, to see if they're supplying the kind of feedback you want.
>> No. 87555
>>87468 >sage in the email field.
I knew about that I guess i just forgot
>Using a name
I honestly thought my name field was still filled in I don't know how it was deleted.
>Post in a review thread.
To be honest I didn't know there was so many a flaw in my story and I wanted to get it noticed becaause of the message I'm trying to get across. From now on though it's going to go through review first before I make a thread for it.

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87241 No. 87241 [View]
#Single fic #Grimdark
I wrote this on a whim when listening to music.
Its not much and it had no real meaning but I can never bring myself to destroy things I write. As such I will put it here in this thread Comments/anything welcome here though I don't know if Ill come back to this thread.

picture unrelated because I don't save a lot of pony pictures.
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>> No. 87356
I could email you the code for sturm6ZLeI, STURMmO1em, or any number of others, but you'd have to trust me not to write it down for future trolling. Making your own is clearly the best idea. I assume you're using tripcode explorer, if not, go here: http://desktopthread.com/Tripcode_Explorer/
Once you're there, please explain the problem you're having in more detail.
>> No. 87361
From what I gather, you just type "sturm" in the box on the left, and press the green triangle at the top. Then, once you get a tripcode you like, copy the #numbersandstuff string associated with it. Paste it into ponychan's name-box [and put "ion" before it, of course]. That should work.
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53416 No. 53416 [View] [Last 50 posts]
Hi! This is a fic review thread! Pull up a haybale and git comfortable! Here's what's goin' on in this thread:

Applejinx will look at and/or read a buncha fics. Said pony gets stuff run on ED (twice now, different things, first was a country song, second was a fic) and is working as an editor/proofer for a very very small press.

There will NOT be line editing, there will NOT be divin' into 200K word epic OC pony uhhh... epics, there will NOT be amusin' snarkin (we hope!).

What there will be is this- readin' of pony fic that uses the mane cast and is tryin' to be IC- and respondin', IC, with them little icons to make it more amusin. For the purposes of this here thread AJ will BE Applejack. Excepting when that pony will be Dash, or Twi, or whatever character has an IN character observation on the fic in question. (look for the Dashie-powered in the trip code if it gits confusin'.) Not only that, the intent will not BE line editing- I got too dang much of that to do already. It will be finding the spark of wonderfulness inside every fic and helping it grow and be celebrated. If you ain't got wonderfulness, please go seek line editing elsewhere until your mane is presentable =)
Won't be no IC-ing from this pony outside 'o this thread (apart from the existin' striking resemblance) so make the most of it, it won't be invadin' /rp/ anytime soon. It's just a way to keep it interesting and fun in case it becomes *ulp* ...a big job!
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I can never tell. When I do make a new thread, I might need to just say 'anything is fair game but if I can't relate to the ponyness of it you'll hear about that in no uncertain terms'. Some folks intend to be incredibly IC and miss completely. Some have no such intention and get really close...

I guess we're not actually on autosage, huh?
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Naw, this is autosage- I'll get a new thread goin' pretty soon, but I have this watched so it won't affect my ability to respond.
>> No. 87518

Thanks for your thoughts. I intend to implement your suggestion about Celestia wanting to be merciful, I see now that she would be more in character that way.

Just as you and your co-thread runner were scared by the idea of having Pinkie kill Applejack, I would never in a million years have her kill one of the mane cast.

I also wanted to clarify that the point of the story isn't just to be grimdark for the sake of being grimdark; what I was really trying to get across was the unbreakable bond between the Mane 6 that survived even when Pinkie was insane and treated them like dirt. I honestly struggled with having Pinkie commit a murder in the first place, and so I don't intend to take the dark aspect any further. While your suggestions would be brilliant if grimdark was the point, the dark portions were simply MacGuffins, meant to drive the story forward.

Apologies if I scarred any of you; coming across as an "intelligent Cupcakes" was certainly not the point of my fic. Thank again for your time!

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86671 No. 86671 [View]
Hey all,

I've hit a wall on my current writing endeavors and I thought i would try and get my creative juices flowing again with a change of pace. I was thinking I would love to do some work on perhaps bringing the Daring Doo Series to life in a series of short stories/small novellas (under 100k words), and I thought I would get some opinions.

Firstly, has this already been done to death? I did a quick search of the past posts and only saw one thread that didn't seem to really go anywhere, but one post did indicate there may a lot of DD submissions out there. So I guess I'm asking if it would be worth my time?

Secondly I was thinking of doing this as a more serious type story, but with a little playfulness (more Indiana Jones style), and I was wondering if anyone knew if there was a canon list of the books aside from the first one, or am I free to go in my own direction?

Thirdly, any thoughts of legalities of this? As far as I can tell Hasbro has been very lenient with our community, and it's not like I would be looking to have these published/make money on these. This would be my first contribution to the community as I have only been a brony for about a week (but man did I fall hard for those ponies!). I ask specifically because I was thinking of starting with my own telling of "Daring Doo and the Quest for the Saphire Stone" or should I just skip it and continue from there?

Lastly, wtf is Alweezotal? I was think of maybe a jackal that had a magic accident or something? Also, is it Daring Do? Because in the episode it almost looks like it's spelt "Darine Do" on the book cover.
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>> No. 87186
I was thinking about, say, Marty McFly and Jennifer in Back to the Future. Rollicking adventure can be spiced up with some well-placed romance.
>> No. 87195
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=teTQF04jxRc From a really old movie about the movie industry.
>> No. 87223
ha! that was pretty darn good.

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86359 No. 86359 Locked [View]
Some of you might know me already, as a proofreader/reviewer in EqD and my frequent status as edit hors in FiMfiction. I like to do the one thing no one likes: menial text editing. Despite the current massive influx of fic's we've been getting, or possibly, due to those, my filthy masochistic tendencies have reared up and have driven me here. Basically, I offer my services as both reviewee and editor to you. I will accept any type of fic, unless is abjectly repulsive. All I request in return is that you at least skim your work before submitting it, and provide me with a brief summary, a "rating" and general info about it. (length, characters, ect).
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I have returned in my (not so) holy glory! TIME TO REEEEEAAAAD!
>> No. 87207
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The report bugged, could you report the post again?
I am assuming you do not want the thread deleted, as that is what the report is telling me.
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My mistake, i should learn to read better.
Thread locked because OP was not the person who made this thread.
It appears to have been a friend looking to cause trouble for him.

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86936 No. 86936 [View]
#Reviewer #Sad
This is my story im just wanted to see if someone could help me with it because this is my first real story. im not the best writer but I put I am trying to get better.

One lonely Brony
Austin Guillen (Gui Gui)

It all started when a good friend of mine told me about My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic. When he first told me about it, I gave him a typical, “ugh… pony’s man.” Obviously, this was way before I was a brony, or even knew what the term brony meant. Eventually, after weeks of refusing to even watch the show. I broke down and told my self.
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See >>86942. There's a link to all the review threads on the front page. By making your own thread for your fic and asking for reviews, you're basically wandering into a school hallway during class and wondering why there are no teachers around to teach you.
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There's no point in doing that. If someone just rewrites it for you, you'll go and make another chapter with all of the same mistakes again. What you can do, however, is submit this to Chowder's review thread (he specializes in helping newbies). He'll point out the mistakes, provide suggestions to fix them, and you can learn by doing it yourself. You should also crack open several thousand pages of real, published work and glean how to make a good style with them.
If you want to be a good writer, you must first be a great reader.
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That... Is without a doubt the best way I've heard it put so far...

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