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129680 No. 129680 [View]
#Single fic #Sad

She walked slowly through the halls of Canterlot, her aged body making every step torture.
>She had to see the child, one who had been praised so highly, she knew it wasn’t the one, but even so she sounded promising.
>Celestial looked at her newest student, just observing her strength in magic had been inspiring.
>Soon the test, and if she passed she would really make a great successor to the crown.
>A cough exited her throat, even the life of an alicorn would not last forever.
“I have no choice.”
>She heads off to the royal treasure and retrieves the egg.
>It sat there as it has for centuries, waiting for the element of friendship.
“I am sorry little one; your master must be another.”
>Her horn lifts the egg up, polishing it to a crystal gleam.
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>> No. 129690
Any comments, questions, advice? This is just the outline. My real story is already on FIMFICTION
>> No. 129691
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I tried to make a video of me reading but I wasn't able to get far. You've got some telly lines, but your biggest problem is grammar. I also get the feel that English is not your first language. Grammarbook.com is a nice tool for learning to write in english, and you can check out Ezn's guide or the Editor's Omnibus for overall writing tips.
>> No. 129692
First I do have a writing disability, but actually this is a rough draft. I have the story on FIMFICTION and it is of much better quality. Thanks for the advice and i will look into it. However if you want to edited version. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/166524/sunsets-on-spike-sunset-of-canterlot

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129668 No. 129668 [View]
#Author #Collection #Sad #Grimdark

The first one is:I'm a little dragon.
This is my attempt to make Spike's behavior during the series (just the first 3 seasons) to make some sense.

The second is called Umbra (only later I realized it was a common story name, but I guess it's too late to change since it's relevant to the story.).
I hope you enjoy.

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129615 No. 129615 [View]
#Author #Sad #Grimdark #Gore

I've been working on this story for a while, and I'd love for it to get some more attention.

Synopsis: Pinkie Pie has a wonderful life. Always surrounded by friends and family, she has everything she could ever want, and never stops smiling. One Hearth's Warming Eve, however, that all changes when Pinkie Pie is abducted and subject to horrific cruelty by somepony she thought she could trust.

Story Page: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/103504/popped
>> No. 129617
>Mature · Gore
No gore allowed on Ponychan, sorry.

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129538 No. 129538 [View]
#Single fic #Comedy #Shipping

Hey guys, I'm trying to spread my fic around, so please give it a read, leave a review, whateves.

>> No. 129544
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>The Next Generation
>Pic is what my thoughts immediately turned to
>> No. 129551
Make it so...

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129496 No. 129496 [View]
#Reader #All

Hello, I am a reader from youtube!
I would love it if I could have your opinion on my readings :)
(If you like them, remember to subscribe and like hehe)
>> No. 129497
Should remove the banter in the first minute of the story. Metadata (e.g., word count and synopsis) can be included in the video description. The narration only needs two things: the title, then the story. No point wasting time on other things.

Voice is clear and understandable. Microphone quality is adequate.

Inflection to disambiguate dialogue from narration is good. It's easy to tell the difference between them.

Pauses between sentences are timed well.

I would suggest adding slightly longer pauses between paragraphs.

There are a lot of stutters and flubs due to this seemingly being done in one take. If you're serious about making a good reading, you need to do more than one take. This issue bleeds into everything else I've mentioned and more-or-less mars the whole thing.

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99659 No. 99659 [View]
#Author #Single fic #Normal
Synopsis: A changeling who has been at the side of an Equestrian mare for most of his life finds himself in the middle of the changeling invasion of Canterlot. He has no love for this Queen or her destructive desires. He merely wishes to stay at the side of his lovely wife. But with his true nature revealed, how will she react?


This was basically the result of an all-nighter on an errant stroke of inspiration. After some pressure from the folks at FimFic I decided to rewrite parts of it, giving it a new introduction and better character introductions.

So please, read the revised version. The original is just there for the sake of archiving the comments on it, and for people in a morbidly curious mood that wonder what the result of an all nighter fueled by a rogue rampaging muse and a box of Jaffa Cakes looks like.
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>> No. 99853

Sorry to pester, but I thought I'd jot down a few notes in case we decide to go our seperate ways.

-Isn't there a canon pegasus named Flitter?

-Flitter has wings--why doesn't he save himself at the end? One thought is that he makes the concious decision not to.

-Referring to the changelings collectively as "The Swarm" reminds me of Starcraft's Zerg, in a bad way. See if you can find another noun--perhaps "The Host?"

-If you want to maintain their insect-like ways, perhaps give the Changelings an accent. My first thought is that you could change their S's to "zz"--for example, "Changelingzz" or "the Zzwarm." If you do it right, this could be effective, and you could show that flitter has the accent, rather than tell us.
(My first thought--if you're still calling them "The Swarm," have them use an "S" word before you use the name "Swarm." That way, we can figure out what their accent is before we read the word "Zzwarm," making it easier to figure out what they're actually saying.)
>> No. 99857

-Flitterheart, actually, and it's a mare. I wanted the changeling to have a simpler, vaguer name than most normal pony names. Anyway, since it's kinda the story title, I'm not changing that :P

-He's utterly despairing at that moment. He has come to identify himself so much with his pony form that he panics at the thought of losing it. And that's what just happened.

-Hmm, I'd go for Colony or Hive or something, then.

-The accent stuff: I thought about that, but I think at the end he doesn't actually say anything it could be applied to. I also imagine his voice being more practised than that of Chrysalis' changelings, meaning he doesn't really have an accent, but more of an odd sound to it, like Chrysalis' own undisguised voice.

As for the timeline, I'd imagine them to have known each other for a few months, tops, but not really first-date-accident stuff. Flitter was, of course, comparing it to the 20 years they spent together afterwards. I've sent more details on that to your email.
>> No. 129484
I'm not sure why, but this image makes me wonder if there are changeling sea ponies.

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129419 No. 129419 [View]
I've never really been into fan fiction, pony or otherwise, because a lot of times they're sort of slow and drawn out. I usually end up loosing interest after a few pages. But I was on Deviant Art and stumbled across a fic where Rarity gets sick and dies. It was so good I ended up reading the whole thing in one go, and ended up thinking about it for days after.

So now that I can see there really is some good stuff out there, I was wondering if you could tip me off to some five star, cream of the crop fics?
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>> No. 129458
My favorite fanfic is A Mighty Demon Slayer Grooms Some Ponies. Its a crossover between G1 and G4, and its a lot darker than it sounds. Its more about G1 than G4, but that's kind of the beauty of it.

>> No. 129473
Don't know about the rest of you, but I think I'm fine with knowing nothing about MLP pre-gen4.
>> No. 129488
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ah, but then we would never learn of his most glorious ooze, The Smooze.

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58852 No. 58852 [View] [Last 50 posts]
Greetings and welcome to the very first of the Fallout Equestria and Side Stories community thread. Within these virtual walls, you shall be free to discuss all matters “Fallout Equestria”, present your ideas or pieces for discussion and in general just interact with each other in order to honor the great work that Kkat has done. So now, come in, comment, present yourself to others, start discussions, present your own works, give feedback to others works, derail, rerail and in general just have fun.

Compilation document:http://tinyurl.com/FoESSCP
Note: Due to some odd policy, two links are too many links for this post, so the post to the main story shall be included in linked inside this document.
The current collection of stories and Collaborations, open to anyone who wants to add, just ask.

Please go and join the collaboration documents.

New writers, or non-writers, are always welcome to join the discussion and contribute whatever they might be thinking or working with at the moment. Want to be added to the list of authors? Say so, you will be contacted and then added to the list. You just want to write a one-shot? Do by all means. A bug bit you and you decided to turn madness into Fallout Equestria related words? I don’t know how many will actually read it, but you can post here too!! All writers not in the list are welcome to join, I repeat, [b]ALL ARTIST NOT IN THE LIST ARE WELCOME TO JOIN.
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>> No. 127668
Holy shit that dead pony is disturbing to look at.
>> No. 129437
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Hi, I'd like to add my FoE story to the list and apparently this is the place to do so.

Title: Fallout Equestria - The Wish Machine

Author: RealmOfMereShadows


Synopsis: Nopony ever wanted the apocalypse, the fall of the Balefire bombs, the release of the pink cloud and all the mess that happened afterward. Fortunately, I survived the Last Day. Unfortunately, I lived long enough to see the hell that followed and fought long enough to leave my mark into the brickwork of the shaping Equestrian Wasteland.
My name is Vault Skin, but ponies know me as 'Waste'. And this is my story.

Link: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/139920/fallout-equestria-the-wish-machine
>> No. 129469
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need a name and help to write a story to my OC1

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129464 No. 129464 [View]
#Single fic #Discussion #Grimdark #Adventure, AU

So, I'm curious, would anyone be willing to share their opinion on this fic I've been working on? I want to try submitting it to Equestria Daily, and I already tried once and edited it to improve it.


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86717 No. 86717 [View]
I used to go on fimfic and browse the new queue every day. I would appreciate a few and add maybe one to my tracking. So I would be looking at the synopsis of about 40 fics and checking out about 5.

Starting about 5 days ago, I have found ZERO new fics worth reading. Of course this is my opinion, but objectively, I can hardly see how more than one or two could be worth reading. I've kept up fics since a few months after the show premiered, so I consider myself a pretty good authority on the trends, and I know I'm not being too biased because there are tons of fics I decide not to read for reasons other than quality

Here's the proof. This was all the front page of fimfiction.
1k words bad grammar

"troll" fic I recognize from fanfiction.net Annyoing to even try to read or laugh at.
"On the day of the summer sun celebration, Equestria is transported into our dimension, and a few scientists at NASA are trying to figure out what's going on." Maybe it's unfair of me to put this one here, but I'm in a bad mood.
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>> No. 86848
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review? no that was a comment. You want a review trust me there are plenty of threads here.
There must be some irony in the OP actually causing one of the writers to reevaluate their work.
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>There must be some irony in the OP actually causing one of the writers to reevaluate their work.
mfw I lack an effective way to express that's how /fic rolls.
>> No. 86869
Someone told me this ones good:

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129448 No. 129448 [View]

Look, guys. I really want to write a fanfic from the POV of a journal that lays out a pony's perspective of a Bolshevik revolution in Equestria. Now, I have a lot of reading before I even touch this, but I couldn't help myself. Here is my adaptation to "White Army, Black Baron" (https://www.marxists.org/history/ussr/sounds/mp3/Belaia-Armiia-Cherny-Baron.mp3) to Equestria:

>Snow-colored legions, charcoal baron,
>Seeking to give back the Queen her throne!
>From crowded Manehattan to seas to the west,
>The Ponies' Red Army is the best!

>So grip your spears and swords!
>We'll slaughter all the lords!
>We will shed their vile blood!
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Afraid I've never been good with lyrics, but it seems to rhyme, so that's good I guess?
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You keep well with the cadence of the original russian.
The first refrain seems odd, because you consolidate four lines into one, and then add in your own.

Original (translated poorly into english)
So let the Red
Grip with power
Its bayonet with a callous hand
And we must
Go into the last mortal battle

You make great rhymes, but it feels odd to have five lines not in the original thrown in like that.

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129424 No. 129424 [View]

I don't plan on beating around the bush about this.

Ponychan is dying. By some standards, it's already dead. Only a handful of threads are still active, and even the ones that are receive little traffic.

When I first began my review thread, I received an average of one request per day, sometimes more. The Training Grounds sometimes had as many as fifty reviews in its queue, and this board was generally abuzz with activity, constantly.

But now it's gone, and I'm not quite sure why. I was out of the fandom loop for quite sometime, so maybe I missed some important developments. Now that I'm back however, I'm horrified at the prospect of this website falling into obscurity. Ponychan is where I developed my true love for My Little Pony and made some wonderful friends.

So, ladies and gentlemen, let's figure this out: what happened, and what are we going to do to keep our community alive?
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>> No. 129433
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We don't have the dignity to follow in the footsteps of SALT. They closed down before everything collapsed under its own weight. We're already past that point. The only thing I can say is, most of us have moved to greener pastures. A lot of us have moved to fimfic, and are working there with different groups.

Ponychan doesn't offer anything which they can't.

Honestly, I don't know what to do. I don't know what to say. mlpchan /fic/ is dead. I don't know what happened to the chat. Ponychan /fic/ is just barely holding on to being what it was. We only have about three or four of the Old Guard holding the fort.

I... I really don't know. I don't know if Ponychan is worth it. There are so many threads here that stand as a testament to the Glory Days... but they are now still, idle, and no more are coming in.

Should I let alone these hallowed halls? Should I leave them to rest in peace? There are so many who were there in the Glory Days, many whom I never met. But to those I have met, and learned from, and perhaps made friends with, I am deeply thankful.

Maybe we're nearing the end?
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Ignore filename.

Where do we go from here?



We tried moving once, to MLPChan, and we stayed there for a while. That didn't work out, and traffic was split between the old and new /fic/ boards, so we came back. But things have changed a whole bunch since then, haven't they? Fimfiction's more than doubled in size, and I think it's uncontested that it's the go-to source for fanfiction now, for readers who regularly read fanfiction. Groups have gotten a lot bigger. Most of the old reviewers have gone to be EQD pre-readers or Seattle's Angels members, or aren't into pony stories anymore.

On top of that, public reviews aren't much in demand anymore. If a writer's good, he or she usually has editors that are also good writers. You know, friends. Like how shortskirtsandexplosions's thread used to be, except much more common. After all, why wait over a month for the feedback of someone you don't know when you can poke a friend on Skype? Fimfiction's popularity system rewards quantity over quality, and when you need to push a new short story (or "Chapters 1 and 2" of a story you're probably not going to continue) every week or two, you might not want to or need to wait. Not to say good writers necessarily care that much about getting into the featured box, or even that those who do aren't "good writers", but those you see in the featured box the most often aren't writing the type of stories that the more vocal members of /fic/ look to read.
>> No. 129440
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>Ponychan is dying.
>this board was generally abuzz with activity, constantly.
>But now it's gone, and I'm not quite sure why.
I could tell you why, but I refuse to uncap that can of worms. The problem has been fixed, but the damage has been done. We still get recommendations, but mostly from those who say this place in its hayday. Everypony new goes to other resources which are now available. We've simply fallen off the map. The sad reality is that /fic/ only survived because it was here first. There are better, more convenient resources out there, with equally skilled individuals. We're kind of like the iPhone. When it first came out, it was cool, it was new, it was creative and exciting. Now it's just a stale old product eating the dust of younger competitors.

I'm sure we'd get a slow trickle back in, which I can tell you as I've been watching, has indeed been happening. It will be quite a while before it's a roaring stream again, if ever, but traffic now is significantly higher than it was six months ago.

Alakazam here put it nicely
>There are so many who were there in the Glory Days, many whom I never met. But to those I have met, and learned from, and perhaps made friends with, I am deeply thankful.
> I try to help out in the Training Grounds, but I can't review like I used to. I don't have the fervor.
In my case it's more that I soured with age--like sweet milk--but the result is the same. I choose not to review for fear of forgetting to be helpful when a bad story comes my way--I'm not as optimistic as I once was. And on top of that, I'm only finishing up a few last promises before I begin my own original works. Ponies has been a fun phase in my life, and I never fully abandon friends, but I've moved on, and pony fiction just doesn't enthrall me the way

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129183 No. 129183 [View]

So when will somebody write alterations or complete remakes of the season 4 premiere? Would some reviews help?

The demand is actually much higher than some would believe.
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>> No. 129194
Remake as in a different structure and different premise, which only utilizes a few loose ideas from the original source.
Separate premier works too, besides there's a huge load of stories about Nightmare Moon's banishment.
The tv show doesn't have standards.
>> No. 129195
>The tv show doesn't have standards.

Which is why I said "the standards set by any individual episode".
>> No. 129417
When people realize what true fan-fiction is, as opposed to original fiction.

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81826 No. 81826 [View] [Last 50 posts]
#Discussion #Whyyyy?
Don't get me wrong, I think it's great that so many newfriends feel like helping out, but I think this is just getting ridiculous. I've got a sinking feeling that some of the newer reviewers haven't spent much time around the board, and as such they face a certain stigma, but not for no reason.

Take a look at the review threads that have lasted multiple posts and see what they're doing right and wrong. They've lasted this long not only because the reviewers have been able and willing to do so, but because they provide a quality service. Much of the work comes in the form of grammar fixes that it seems to me that several of the newest threads either ignore or only factor very slightly into account.

Now, from listening in on some IRC chats, I've got the feeling that many of the long standing reviewers are in need of a break, and these newer threads are well-timed to lessen the fallout so many departures, however temporary, can cause. In the interest of a /fic/ board that functions smoothly and churns out quantities of good fanfics, I'm glad that so many are taking up the challenge of reviewing.

Still, one thing really bugs me. These threads, and the reviewers seem to have come from nowhere. They haven't contributed to the most important largest review thread, The Training Grounds. I think it'd be far more beneficial for our new reviewers to spend some building some kind of rep across multiple threads, but most specifically via reviews in TTG. There you can arguably contribute the most without cluttering up the board as a whole.

Seeing as I'm probably ranting and rambling at this point I'll just stop.
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>> No. 82236
Seems like everyone is trying to find the perfect solution. Too bad that hurts more then it helps. Throw it up to a vote if you have to, because at this point your all taking turns pissing in the same cup.
>> No. 82270

...but #ttg has been deader than a skunk on a highway for little under a month by now.
>> No. 129393
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Hi, just a general question about reviews here.
In the Training grounds review thread, does a story you want to have reviewd have to be pony related?

I haven't read the guidelines since I went there a bit about a year ago so I don't remember if it said anything about i and I really would prefer to not spend the hour I'll need re-reading EVERYTHING...

TL;DR:can you post any story for review in the training ground or is it strictly pony related only?

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72569 No. 72569 Locked Autosaged [View] [Last 50 posts]
Welcome, one and all, to the TWELFTH iteration of the round-table discussion that is known to some as THE CONVERSION BUREAU Thread! Started back in March, this over-arching fanon universe of The Conversion Bureau has spawned over 40 spin-offs, many worthy of standing on their own as fantastic stories in their own right. Come in, sit down, have a cold one, and enjoy your reading! Feel free to participate if you feel so inclined to do so!

Obligatory video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sXoYK4b_q24

Old Thread: >>60773

We’re always ready to welcome new writers and any ideas they may have! Also, make sure to comment and give feedback on new stories and new updates! Authors absolutely love hearing what people think of their work. Be sure to try to offer civil and constructive criticism if you find any problems with their story! (They like it when you do that) If you don't say anything, you are depriving the author of input that could make their story 10 times better, so speak up whether you're a lurker or a regular poster!

Compilation post on Equestria Daily: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/04/conversion-bureau-compilation.html
Midnight Shadow's TCB guide: http://tinyurl.com/436eesa
Midnight Shadow's Story Compilation Document: http://tinyurl.com/43othw2
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>> No. 129390
but then again what am I
>> No. 129391
but then again what am I
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