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17866 No. 17866 [View] [Last 50 posts]
Alright, I need some help here. I'm writing a fic which will span multiple chapters called "Spirits of Harmony" which is vaguely inspired by (but not a crossover with) Avatar: The Last Airbender, specifically the way Aang can talk to past Avatars if he wants to.

The basic story is that the Mane 6 discover that the Elements contain echoes of past wielders that they, through Twilight's command of magic, can communicate with. This acts as a framing device for three seperate stories with original characters set varying amounts of time in the past.

In terms of "goals" for this fic, I have these set out:

1. Decouple the virtues the Elements represent from specific personality traits, and illustrate - both to the audience and the Mane 6 - that there are different ways to be honest, kind, joyful, generous, loyal and magical.

2. Tell some cool, engaging, entertaining stories with new characters.

3. Have a moral at the end - that virtues don't always take the form you expect, but are always worth having - so that Twilight can learn another important lesson about friendship.
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>>97859
Good to see you too buddy!

> hung up on a scene I can't end
You don't say? Welllllll... you want an extra pair of eyes? I admit, I may be half-motivated by my love of spoilers, but I'd like to help out with this great story again, if you want.

Good luck gettin' some shut eye mate, I recommend whiskey!
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http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/07/story-spirits-of-harmony.html

Oh, also, have some art. Credit to C4tspajamas.
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Very excited to continue on. :D We're broaching new territory!


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#Discussion
I'm not sure if we've had this before, but I feel that setting out a set of general advice on creating an OC might be helpful. Obviously, there are no specific rules to it, and who knows, your robot sparkles alicorn might come out amazing, but its much more likely "Princess Bubblegum" is going to crash and burn. In no particular order, here are some important things to remember. (these are just general suggestions based on experience, feel free to ignore them.)
1) The color scheme and physical appearance: It might not seem that important in a fic, but a OC that's designed in a physically unattractive way can be a major detractor. When creating one remember a few simple things: all ponies, without exception are guided by a pastel color scheme. (if you don't know what this is, grandmaster google will tell you.) If your OC is completely black, with a bright red mane you are already heading the wrong way. The physical traits are important too. Don't give your OC metal wings, or spiked neck chains, etc if you want it to seem legitimate. Do any ponies in the show have what you want to give it? No? Then its probably a bad idea.
2) Mental Traits: If you give your pony speical powers, (pyromancy, nutty magic, etc.) you are heading down a path that rapidly heads to bad, and more bad. A character can be interesting and deep without having a "dark past' or "speshul magix". The behaviors and actions should be what are singular, not gimics like these.

(clearly there's more, this is just off the top of my face thinggy; if you want to add more, you are more then welcome to._
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>>89318
And then, at night, he hits the local clubs and is transformed into his secret dance-sona: a latin lover with glorious long locks and a flamboyant purple dressy coat with tight black pants (showing off his colthood?) as well as shiny gold necklaces plus gold bracelets... like a pony version of Stanley Tucci in 'Shall We Dance?'

But can he keep his secret from his normal life friends? And what about these usurping dancer ponies such as Fluttershy and Twilight that have their own dance-sonas... and are trying to steal his title as 'king of the dance floor'?

...

...

...

Oddly enough, what you just wrote worked perfectly with an idea that I already had.
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>>89318

Heh, I see what you're getting at, but that ain't what we're saying at all. Like I said, a character has to be interesting--the problem most people have is that they try to make their character interesting in ways that are incredibly shallow and cliche as opposed to building a relatable character. Your character doesn't have to be bland...in fact, bland is bad. Your character has to have that certain something about them that's unique to them for us to care, whether it be a particular belief or a personality trait, they have to have something that not only makes us remember them a week later, but doesn't make us cringe when we remember them.


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#Discussion

Months ago I asked Nick Nack to review a story that I'd written. In Nick's thread, Seattle volunteered to help review the story instead. I agreed to that, and the result was that he reviewed the first of two chapters, quit, and Nick reviewed the second one.

I've had a discussion with Nick about the second chapter, but I couldn't get a hold of Seattle. It's been a while, I've neglected the fic, and I wanted to try and get a better grip on how to fix it. Right now I'm not sure if I should try to reach Seattle again or get another opinion on it.

Review post is at >>128900 if you're curious.
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>> No. 129319
>>129318
I'm pretty sure the planet orbits him.
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Maybe it's because I introduced him to Ingress and he's gotten really hooked on it?

Nah. I have no earthly idea where he is / what he's doing and I don't think anyone does.
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>>129310

If you ever find him, chain him up and drag him back here

Um, I mean, wish him good luck with whatever he's doing.


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129278 No. 129278 [View]
#Single fic #Normal #Adventure

Rainbow Dash, the powerful mare bearing the Element of Harmony, through an unfortunate and unknown turn of events, finds herself in an entirely different world. But it's not a different world, only...a different time.
She finds herself over a thousand years in the past, thrust into a prophecy unknown to her, into a war with the demons of Tartarus, and the weight of a world lays quivering weakly in her hooves.

Link: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/130956/skyclad-honor-bound-a-millennia-past

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94251 No. 94251 Autosaged [View] [Last 50 posts]
#Reviewer #Training Grounds
Authors! Reviewers! We need you to serve your fandom!

Put your writing skills to use, and we'll help you hone them. All kinds are welcome. We'll have you whipped into a lean, mean writing machine before you leave hoof camp! Go on out there and make us proud!

Want to join the proud tradition of longer-term assignments? Then add your name to the esteemed ranks of the Reviewer Corps! Help mold the literary future of our great fandom, and lend your own critical eye to the trainee fics that pass through these gates, even while waiting on your own creations to graduate.

How to submit a fic/find your review: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsHowTo
Casual TL/DR of above guide: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsTLDR
The current list of fanfics: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsQueue
List of TTG regulars: http://tinyurl.com/TGRegulars
The submission form: http://tinyurl.com/TrainingGroundsSubmit
IRC (live chat) howto and rules: http://derpy.me/ttgirc (or #ttg on irc.canternet.org)
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#Single fic #Sad #Shipping

Pinkie has a special feeling for Rainbow Dash. But will the new horror movie twist up their relationship?
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PinkieDash Cupcakes has a special story for /fic/. But will the poor synopsis, missing link and general lack of effort on the OP's part squash any interest in it?
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>>129198

Creepy doughnut Luna has a point. So pony up that story and send it to where it belongs or let your thread languish here, being enormously useless and annoying.


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# an illustrated multimedia fanfiction/project/parody/ponification/satire/alternate ponyverse -- http://ponymarillion.referata.com

SYNOPSIS: The Ponymarillion is an alternate account of the Elder Neighs, or the First Age of Tolkien's World... the origin of "those creatures which in English I call misleadingly Elves". (Silm p.16) It is the ancient drama to which the characters in My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic look back, and in whose events some of them, such as Luna, Celestia and Discord, took part. The tales of The Ponymarillion are set in an age when Tírek, the first Dark Lord, dwelt in Tartarus, and the immortal Alicorns departed the Undying Lands to make war upon him.

The Elements of Harmony were created in ages past by Starfall, most gifted of the Alicorn race. Within them were imprisoned the Light of the Double Trees of Alinor before the Trees themselves were destroyed by Unlight of Unpleasant, the monstrous mother of Changelings. Thereafter the unsullied Light of Alinor lived on only in the Elements; but they were seized by Tírek and set in his Iron Crown, guarded in the fortress of Changorodrim in the north, overlooking the twilight kingdom of Alfalfaland, most ancient of the pony realms east of the Sea. The Ponymarillion is the story of the rebellion of Starfall and her kin against the gods, their exile from the Blessed Realm and return to Little-Equestria; and their war, hopeless despite all heroism of immortals, unicorns, and earth ponies alike, against the great Enemy.

An Appendix may detail little-pone facts such as: a brief glossary of Neighnya, the ancient pony language, and list of names; a map of Alfalfaland and the lands to the north; a map of Ponicéan; the prologue to the unauthorized /oat/ edition; cover art for the Ballantine edition; Starswirl's letters (an early pony alphabet); translations of "actual" pony names into Elvish; family tree; heraldry and cutie-marks of the Great Horses of Alfalfaland; and various other humorous tidbits.

# seeking: one or two bronies (here or
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>>129039

That depends on what exact advice you are currently seeking. If you still want someone well-versed in Tolkien's Silmarillion, you might have a tough time, as I certainly have not read it, nor am I immediately able to name someone here who has.

Now that doesn't mean they don't exist. I’d be willing to bet you dimes-to-dollars we have at least a few folks here who have read it, but just how much you expect of them might be a deciding factor in whether or not they choose to accept your request.

However, if you are just looking for some story-related critique and opinions, I might recommend you try the TTG, perhaps with someone specific requested in your comments. I can recommend morning_angles if you want some grammatical nitpicking. He’s not always a breakneck-paced reviewer at times, but he’s got some good insight. Casca also does fairly well, and I could likely certainly swing away if you need it real badly (Though alas, I am but a mere mook). There can be some good reviewers to choose from in there, if you look through them and do a bit of homework to find a name you really want. If you ask for someone specifically, word should get to them pretty quick (We like just hanging around as much, if not more, than reviewing at times). You’d hopefully hear back on whether or not they will accept your request in a reasonably timely manner.

You can also try asking Roger, though I'm not quite certain if he'll accept and I can't appear to find his specific review thread. Don’t know if he hasn’t made one here yet, or if it’s just gone. Still, might be worth it to ask him. The worst he can say is “I’m not really interested.” At best, he’ll either accept himself or redirect you to someone much more likely to say “yes”.

I’d have recommended Nick to you as well, but I think he’s a little preoccupied with personal issues according to his thread, and will probably not be able to get around to you at this time. You could still ask, but I imagine the ans
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>>129042

Thanks Writer's Block, for the suggestions.

I guess the issue is I'm not so much worried about style / proofreading
(aping different styles is one of the things I'm probably good at)
so much as I need help with:

* style issues from a non-Tolkien perspective from somepony who is still a fantasy fan. This might be helpful.

* pre-reading from the elusive bronies who are Tolkien fans and are dimly familiar with the book. Does not have to be involved as a writer or even give an organized critique... and since I'm putting stuff out in bits and pieces it'd be easy for them to follow along so long as they're dimly familiar with the book.
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Interesting comments on this at: >>/oat/38746889

Explanation: http://derpiboo.ru/479978

>Tree of Harmony

>mine countenance whereupon


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129182 No. 129182 [View]
#Author #Single fic #head cannon

Hey Guys, I am currently writing a headcannon fic on AJ and why her parents left. Its not quite finished, in fact its nowhere near being done, but I wanted to have somebody read what I have and tell me what I need. The story is on my pastebin under
>AJ Headcannon

Look for Morrowisk, that's me!
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Usually, you would be directed to the Story Forge, where they can help hammer out your rough gem. However, with the lack of a/fic/ionado wordsmiths to man the Forge, it has become far less effective than it should be. And as a side note, you don’t need to call your fan-fiction “headcanon.” That’s what fan-fiction is, and fan-fiction is what we do here at /fic/.

I’ll try the best I can to help you.

I was expecting, when I looked up your link (which you could have included within your post) to find a short synopsis detailing what you wanted to write that I could skim quickly to pick up all the information I needed to assist you. However, what you have is a snippet of your story, and snippets are seldom good for anything other than examinations of style. But I won’t be critiquing your style, as I don’t believe that is what you’re asking for. (You can correct me if I’m wrong on this.) So onward with the snippet and I’ll try to pull out the major aspects of your idea that you’re trying to convey.

Ow… this is rough, my friend. If someone more skillfully endowed than me would care to go over everything here, that’d do you a great deal of good. But for now here are my thoughts on your idea as a whole:

(tl;dr: you need a little of everything)

There is nothing wrong with your idea. It’s a perfectly alright one, albeit needing more plot points. The majority of issues arise with the style and mechanics, which I’ve already said I won’t try to examine and fix.


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#Reviewer #Comedy #Adventure
Sorry about previews post, didn't find proper format before, fixed that now :D

Title – The Venture League
Author/Screen Name – Loopy Legend
Email – [email protected]
Tags – Adventure, Comedy,
Synopsis – The Venture League is an organized group of ponies from all over Equestria. They specialize great survival and tactical gear, and adventuring. Simply put the venture League are adventuring ponies for hire, they will do any mission you need of them.
Links - http://www.fimfiction.net/story/8893/1/The-Venture-League/The-Venture-League-Chapter-1---Unexpected-Recruit
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xRvsdZzT3PHpcQTBpd17iRc979kkeHpidCHkisrm_hw/edit?hl=en_US
Chapters Reviewed – Only got 1 (Unexpected Recruit)
Comments/Requests – EQD did send me here, pasting their comments.
1) Extremely basic writing. "She said this and this. Then he did that. She did this, and a bird exploded." Your characters aren't showing much personality, honestly. They're not complicated individuals, but are very nearly what we call 'Talking Heads'. You're making your OC botanist pony sound like they're just out of grammar school.
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>>82941
Yeah, I'm pretty sure it's a pencil myself.
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>>82938
>>82941
>>82948
>> No. 129171
>>82888
where is Geno Blast?


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85974 No. 85974 [View]
#Competition
I didn't see a topic for this, but the voting for the Write-Off has started on FiMFiction. The link is here:

http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=feb_write_off

The prompts were either:
-A fire breaks out in the Everfree Forest
-Strange creatures are attacking Ponyville
-The Mane Six go on a vacation

One of those is being used a lot more than others (pic related). But anyways, if you're bored and feel like reading some fanfics, why not go over and vote?
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>>86808

>I'm pretty sure two thirds of Band of Brothers fanfics are probably M/M snugglefests and slice of life stories

BRB, off to search the internets for BoB slash...

http://fanlore.org/wiki/Band_Of_Brothers

>It has a fairly heavy slash fandom base, probably because there are few female characters in the course of the series
>> No. 86815
>>86215
It's 240.

I really like this setup. So far, all the pairs I've gotten have either been the same level of awful, or one's been far and away the obvious choice. But usually the former.
>> No. 86847
>>86809
I agree with this.


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126295 No. 126295 [View]
I'm thinking of writing a pony fanfic but I want to know if the concept has already been overused.

The story has Celestia revealing the true origin of Spike, how long ago before ponyville existed there was this giant black dragon who was pure evil, caused unstoppable destruction and forced the princesses to send their entire army against him.
They were unable to defeat him, and the dragon almost manages to destroy both princesses, but at the right moment, Celestia uses the Elements of Harmony to encase the power of the Dragon and it results in the egg that end up becoming Spike.

The story then has the characters dealing with the fact that the evil side of Spike is becoming stronger, and Twilight has to decide how to deal with this, Will she choose to end the evil inside Spike by killing or exiling him? Or will she try to help Spike keep the evil inside him under control?

Suggestions and critiques are welcome.
>> No. 126310
Story Forge: >>119870

Your first story probably isn't going to be very good. Just try to have fun with it. Don't worry about making something that you want to show to other people until you know that you like writing.


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129126 No. 129126 [View]
#Badfic #anything

I feel like reading a really awful fanfic right now. They are just fun to read and laugh at.

Preferably under 2000 words but anything is fine!

Pic unrelated
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>>129213
Two? Son, that story is from ye olde days of season one. It's nearly three now.
Hell, the thread for it is still around: http://www.ponychan.net/chan/fic/res/6938.html
>Pic
Too bad I never got around to the shipping parts :/ I ended up getting in over my head and lost the whimsy that had made the beginning so easy to write with all my plans and ideas. Sometimes I wish I hadn't gotten reviews and done reviews myself since it made me far too self-critical, to the point where I was an expert and convincing myself the idea sucked and I shouldn't even try.

Ah, to be young and naive again...
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>>129213
>>129223

You guys give me many sads.
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>>129235
(It was either that or the "You make me sad" line from Holy Grail)


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#Discussion

I haven't read any fics in a while, and I'm interested in seeing what's popped up since the last time I was into it. So, can I get some recommendations? My only two caveats are they must be 1) Finished fics and 2) No clopfics (shipping is okay).
>> No. 127355
MLPchan's /fic/ is the active one. You'll have more luck there for future threads.
Simply Rarity.
Tales.
It's Dangerous Business, Going Outside your Door.
Fallout: Equestria
>> No. 127359
Useful information? When did you leave and what have you read.
>> No. 127362
>>127359
It's been about a year I guess? I don't remember all which ones I've read it. It was kinda sporadic.


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46534 No. 46534 [View] [Last 50 posts]
Hello! I'm Squeak, and this is my third thread, that's so cool! Thank you to everyone who takes the time to post here telling me what they think, or just drops by to pal around. I do adore your feedback and random musings. I'm the writer of several fics, the most popular being Number 12, and Traveler, which are Doctor Whoof stories, You can read them, and all my other stories, in the handy guide below.

In anycase, in Squeaky tradition, I'll post my newest fic in the header: Gaia a short chapter story staring Fluttershy, a strange mare called Flower and a series of events which culminate in a great Equestrian secret being revealed:

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/635/Gaia-

As for all my other stories (Gun With Occasional Pony, The Catastrophic Case of the Cutie Mark Crusaders, Etc.) Check out this handy guide!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fN8-rYbzCiWro_4onp7JtdW3IxnvXcv6muvUGpw_CYs/edit?hl=en_US


Onwards and Upwards!
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>>111200

Oh! I'm sorry, somehow I just saw this!

Here's a handy dandy alternate downloads page!

http://askponyinabox.tumblr.com/post/23015837805/downloads-downloads-for-everything
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>>112016
thanks
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And they never found the body.

THE END.


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82713 No. 82713 [View]
#Single fic #Sad #Death #My first fanfic
Zetch galloped through the streets of Manehatten, his wife Zuri and their foal Eve following close behind. They were being chased by 10,000 Equestrian army soldiers. The family was stopped in an alleyway. The soldiers surrounded them. They all wanted him dead for killing a stallion he never met. "Please, leave my family out of this!" A soldier spoke up. "If they interfere, we'll kill them too." Zetch then did the only thing he could: fight. He started shooting beams from his horn and blowing gusts of wind from his bat wings. The soldiers were too overwhelming, because they knocked him unconsious and carried him away. When he woke, he was tied to 2 posts. He could see soldiers surrounding him, but he saw Zuri and Eve next to him. "Zetch Aplon, your are hereby being executed for the mudrer of Irontin C. Copperfin. Your next words will be your last, so use them carefully." Zetch looks at Zuri's tear-stained face. "Zuri, I want you to know I love you and that I always will, even when I die." Zuri hugged him. "I love you too." Zetch turned to Eve. "Eve, sweetie, daddy's not coming home. I want you to take good care of Mommy for me, okay?" Eve cried and hugged her father. "Okay daddy!" Two soldiers pulled them away. "Is that all?" Zetch nods his head and lets it hang. "Zetch Aplon, prepare to die." Zetch looks at his family and smiles, tears running down his face. The soldier aims the gun and shoots Zetch point-blank in the head. Zuri and Eve start bauling as the soldiers toss Zetch's body into the ocean.
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>> No. 83535
>>83533
Row, row, fight tha power.
>> No. 83549
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83549
>>83533
Me and Fluttershy have an understanding ^_^.
>> No. 83587
>>83513
"Prolly" is a different pronunciation of Probably, as you have most likely guessed. But yes, I do want a cracker...


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