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>>129815 Former pre-reader here.
Age regression fics (used to be) in the category of "not necessarily banned like FoE or BiE, but they generally have to be exceptional / bring something new to the table in order to be worth posting".
What you've got is "Twilight messes up a spell, gets turned into a foal, and Cadence / Retcon Sparkle need to take care of her". It's not necessarily a poorly written story, or even a bad story. But when you're going up against slightly higher standards due to a somewhat controversial genre, you're going to need more than what your story was (which was a simple slice of life / proof of concept fic).
That's what I take "we are not interested in posting this story due to its themes" to mean, at any rate.
From my own personal standpoint, to be more critical of your story, it doesn't really do anything. Now, sure, it's a comedy / slice of life; that doesn't necessarily insist upon a strong, conflict-driven plot. But what you've got is essentially a story that resolves itself. Twilight messes up the spell (conflict / call to action), but it wears off in the fourth-to-last paragraph without anyone doing anything. In a darker story, foal-Twilight could have been left completely alone, in a locked room, and the outcome of the story would have been more or less the same.
I don't quite think this story works as "comedy", either—not enough to tag it as such, at least. Now. Don't get me wrong, you've got a lot of characters who enjoy each others' company, and they make jokes. That's natural, and a basic part of human pony interaction. But if you're doing a slice-of-life fic, it should be expected that characters who like each other are going to crack jokes, just like characters who love each other will romance, or characters that dislike each other will fight. All of the "comedy" in this story seems to amount to the interactions of family—which, it's amusing in its own right, but for me, it doesn't necessarily warrant a "comedy" tag.
The ending line fell flat for me, since it wasn't necessarily a punchline as much as it was a stubborn statement of an adult saying, "I still want that thing you promised to me under different circumstances." Which, it's an amusing concept, but it didn't really leave me with that strong of an impression afterwards.
As with all age-regression fics, I can see how the audience is going to be split between finding things "creepy" or finding them "endearing", in terms of Twilight being turned into a nigh-helpless toddler. I mean, sure, it's an excuse to have foal Twilight, but it's at the expense of having her become mentally disabled. So while Cadence and Retcon Sparkle take it in stride and go with it (putting their hopes in a counterspell / cure), and even while it's somewhat cute to imagine the image of a young Twilight splashing her babysitter, it's still hard for me to ignore the dark undertones of the story. This isn't necessarily a "critique" of the story, but just some commentary that there is a token amount of creepiness to the genre you wrote.
In the end of things, even if mildly creepy, you did write a decent slice of life fic. The dialogue works, and everything more or less feels organic. It's not a bad story, nor are you a bad writer. However, if you have your sights set on EQD, I'd advise trying again with a different story.
Of course, I don't speak for EQD anymore. Consider my statements regarding that blog to be a "fairly educated guess".
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