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130354 No. 130354
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Does anyone know of any good episode-like fanfics that would feel like an episode or something you'd expect from the show staff or bookwriters, not something that relies too heave on fanon (Lyra's human obsession or Doctor Whooves) memes (unless they're referenced subtly and not blown out of proportion like Double Rainboom), shys away from the general feel of the show or is not kid friendly (especially no clop or gore). Preferably one about one of the main characters like the Mane 6, Spike or the CMC. And nothing longer or shorter than you would expect an actual episode. Oh, and some humour and morals would be nice too.

I'm writing my own episode based fanfic and I could use a read of one to get the general idea of how one is written. The premise is that after the CMC have been bullied for too long by Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon, they get Rainbow Dash to stick up for them. However, Rainbow takes it too far and becomes the bully herself.

Any fanfic will do, just as long as it fits the criteria.

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>>130354
Nothing comes to mind off the top of my head, but I don't really read fanfics extensively.

Instead, I can offer a few guidelines based on the structure of many episodes:

1) It may be obvious, but remember the audience you're writing for. You're not writing for the fandom at this point, but you're writing for 6-9 year old children. This is mostly a content warning; you shouldn't scrimp on plot or character development because "fuck 'em, they're kids." Lauren Faust didn't take that approach, and look how great the show started off because of it.

If you want adult humor, do it subtly. Aim over the kids' heads, but don't dwell too long on the (Spiked) punchline.


2) The episodes work best when they're coherent. Meaning, the lesson needs to be a good one to teach kids, and the rest of the plot needs to organically lead up to it. Look at Call of the Cutie as an example of what not to do. The lesson was this:

Sometimes, the thing you think will cause you to lose friends and feel left out can actually be the thing that helps you make your closest friends and realize how special you are.

However, it completely glosses over Apple Bloom's actions earlier in the episode, when she shuns Twist's friendship because Twist got her cutie mark. This weakens the impact if one thinks about it deeply, and it can be avoided if one plans the events of the episode to accommodate for it.

Also, Apple Bloom is kind of a federal attorney to begin with. I don't know what the show's writers were thinking, but damn. She's not a very sympathetic character to begin with, and if her circumstances were slightly different, she could easily have been a replacement lacky to Diamond Tiara.


3) With the above coherence in mind, most episodes follow this basic structure:

- cold open to introduce the conflict + theme song (Don't put the theme song in your fic. It's really, really lame to see that in a fic)
- first act: a potential solution is found
- second act: the potential solution's flaws are demonstrated
- final act: the "real" solution is found, the potential solution's destruction is repaired, and it's wrapped up with a letter to Celestia

Now, this isn't a rigid structure at all (I can think of around half a dozen episodes from Season 1 that deviate from it), but it's a general outline for almost every episode. For example, Applebucking Season:

- cold open: Big Mac is revealed to be injured, leaving Applejack to harvest everything by herself
- first act: Applejack begins harvesting all the apples by herself (potential solution)
- second act: Applejack's responsibilities to her friends and the city are beginning to falter (flaws in the potential solution)
- third act: She admits she needs help, and Twilight Sparkle writes a letter to Celestia.


You've already got your structure laid out and following this:

- cold open: Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon are bullying the CMC
- first act: the CMC search for solutions, and enlist Rainbow Dash to defend them
- second act: Rainbow Dash murders and eats Silver Spoon's heart, gaining her power takes her responsibilities too far and begins bullying Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon
- third act: The CMC feel sorry for Diamond Tiara / Silver Spoon, tell Dash to back off, and have a dialogue with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon. The letter wrapping it up is something like "Today, we learned that when ponies give you problems, it's better to confront them peacefully about it rather than to stoop to their level. That just makes everyone miserable."


4) Characterization is king, here. Some fics get a bye on having one or two characters being out of synch with their show counterparts, but when you're trying to emulate the show as closely as possible, you've got to pay attention to dialogue and actions. My advice for this is to forgo "looking for episode-like fics," and hunt the episodes down on YouTube. After you watch an episode, read through its transcript:

http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/Transcripts#Season_one

and then watch it again, to see how the dialogue is presented in the show. What are the ponies' body language? How does Spike speak differently than Rainbow Dash? Analyze, think, and watch.


Personally, I think the above guidelines will do you better than reading any fics for inspiration. Either way, I wish you luck.
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>>130354
This one always felt like a cute little episode to me.
http://www.equestriadaily.com/2012/06/story-words-failed-her.html

I don't know of many others, though.
>> No. 130385
Here are two that feel like episodes of the show:

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/11893/free-ride-on-the-friendship-express
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/20764/my-faithful-student
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